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Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. v. 2
In contemporary society, the dress code at work is not significant since it does not directly influence work productivity. Some argue that uniform is not less important for employees because of the quality of their work is the main matters. To a certain extent, I agree with this opinion, however, I also think that base on the work’s properties, the staff should choose an outfit suitable for this job. On the one hand, there is a good reason why a number of individuals think that wear is unnecessary. First of all, there are jobs that do not require dressing up because it does not yield any positive effect on work. Some technology companies like Google or Facebook are famous for their relaxed dress code. They aim to create an informal, fun and creative environment. Some jobs such as website designers, programmer, that always just sit at their working desk and look to the laptop screen and file paper all their working time, so they usually do not care about the dress that they wear. Secondly, these occupations do not involve meeting customer or partner, therefore, it should be made free for employees as what to wear a comfortable dress to work. On the other hand, numerous people hold the notion that staff should take dressing style into full consideration. These may work in the sectors that require workers to dress up smartly and professional upfront workers like receptionist, teacher, doctor, etc who meet others face-to-face wherein one’s attire may leave either good or bad impressions. In these situations, even though how you present yourself with your fashion preference may not directly affect how you carry out your responsibilities, it could affect social interaction which are important in such jobs. In conclusion, although one’s clothing preference or dress code at work does not directly productivity, its relevance is worth considering depending on the nature of work.
In contemporary society, the
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code at
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is not significant since it does not
directly
influence
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work
productivity.
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argue that uniform is not less
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important
for employees
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because
of the quality of their
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work
is the main matters. To a certain extent, I
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agree
with this opinion,
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, I
also
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think
that base on the
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work’s
properties, the staff should choose an outfit suitable for this job.

On the one hand, there is a
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good
reason why a number of individuals
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think
that wear is unnecessary.
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First of all
, there are jobs that do not require dressing up
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because
it does not yield any
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positive
effect on
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work
.
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Some
technology
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companies
like Google or Facebook are
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famous
for their relaxed
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dress
code. They aim to create an informal, fun and creative environment.
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Some
jobs such as website designers, programmer, that always
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just
sit at their working desk and look to the laptop screen and file paper all their working time,
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so
they
usually
do not care about the
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dress
that they wear.
Secondly
, these occupations do not involve meeting customer or partner,
therefore
, it should
be made
free for employees as what to wear a comfortable
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dress
to work.

On the other hand
, numerous
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people
hold the notion that staff should take dressing style into full consideration. These may
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work
in the sectors that require workers to
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dress
up
smartly
and professional upfront workers like receptionist, teacher, doctor, etc who
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meet
others face-to-face wherein one’s attire may
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leave
either
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good
or
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bad
impressions. In these situations,
even though
how you present yourself with your fashion preference may not
directly
affect how you carry out your responsibilities, it could affect social interaction which are
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important
in such jobs.

In conclusion
, although one’s clothing preference or
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dress
code at
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work
does not
directly
productivity, its relevance is worth considering depending on the nature of
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work
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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