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Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. v. 3
Nowadays people feel that the way employees dress to work does not really matter and that employers should focus more on the content of their work. I partly agree with this view, as I believe that the quality of work is as vital as the appearance of employees. One of the reasons why the quality of workers is very important is that the success of businesses and firms depend on it. Qualities such as knowledge, skills and experience in any job ensures consumer satisfaction. When consumers are happy with the quality of services, they improve the ratings of the firm. For example, companies like Apple and Google employ the best graduates in various fields. This enables them to produce the best phones and softwares, hence, becoming market leaders. However, what people wear to their work places in any profession is also important. Dressing in official clothes makes a customer more comfortable with the service provider. For example, a medical doctor is expected to be in a white coat. Dressing inappropriately might make patients uncomfortable and withhold vital information. Dressing well also gives employees a sense of seriousness when going to work. If employees wear casual clothes like jeans and flip-flops to work, they might not take their jobs more seriously. This would probably be because, there would be no difference between home clothes and work clothes. In conclusion, I believe that the qualities an employee provides for a firm is as significant as the way they appear in their workplaces.
Nowadays
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feel that the way
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employees
dress to
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does not
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matter and that employers should focus more on the content of their
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. I partly
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agree
with this view, as I believe that the
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quality
of
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work
is as vital as the appearance of employees.

One of the reasons why the
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quality
of workers is
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very
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important
is that the success of businesses and firms depend on it.
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Qualities
such as knowledge,
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skills
and experience in any job ensures consumer satisfaction. When consumers are happy with the
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quality
of services, they
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improve
the ratings of the firm.
For example
,
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companies
like Apple and Google employ the best graduates in various fields. This enables them to produce the best phones and
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softwares
,
hence
, becoming market leaders.

However
, what
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people
wear to their
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work
places in any profession is
also
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important
. Dressing in official clothes
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makes
a customer more comfortable with the service provider.
For example
, a medical doctor is
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expected
to be in a white coat. Dressing
inappropriately
might
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make
patients uncomfortable and withhold vital information. Dressing well
also
gives
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employees
a sense of seriousness when going to
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work
. If
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employees
wear casual clothes like jeans and flip-flops to
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work
, they might not take their jobs more
seriously
. This would
probably
be
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because
, there would be no difference between home clothes and
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work
clothes.

In conclusion
, I believe that the
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qualities
an
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employee
provides for a firm is as significant as the way they appear in their workplaces.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matters is the quality of their work. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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