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Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it’s better to watch these programs on television. In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from this program, television or radio v.2

Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it’s better to watch these programs on television. In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from this program, television or radio v. 2
Technology has made our lives easier. Educational programs are available on the radio and television because of the technology. It is a controversial though that which one better among radio and television. Some people think that it is better to watch these programs on television while some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened on the radio. In my view, it is better to watch on the television. Firstly, television provides visual effect. Some subjects need a visual effect to understand like geometry, biology or chemistry. In these subjects, we would not be able to understand by listening. For example, my brother is attending high school for Science stream in India. He has to learn chemistry. We have an educational TV channel, which provides one chapter of the subject. Each week, he learns something new from that program. He is able to learn from the television because he can watch the effect after of chemicals. If he would listen it on the radio, he would not be able to learn by himself. Also, children learn better with visual. For example, if children would see animals, they will remember them with their name and characteristics. However, they would not learn if they only listen about them. So. I think that educational programs need visual effect to understand. Secondly, students would remember for long time. It is proven that it is easy to remember which we see than we listen. So, if students watch the educational programs on the television, they would be able to remember it for long time. For example, while I was in my primary school, I was watching a program on the television. It was for mathematics formula. The mathematics formulas are basic for every student so they have to remember. I remember those formula till now because, I watched on the television. I think that if I had only listened them on the radio; I was not able to remember for such a long time. So, I think that students would remember the concept for long time if they watch it rather than listen. To conclude, there are more benefits of watching the educational programs on the television over listening it on the radio. It helps to understand with more details and remember for long time. So, because of these reasons, I think that television is the best way to learn form the educational program.
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chemistry. We have an
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IELTS essay Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it’s better to watch these programs on television. In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from this program, television or radio v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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