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Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it’s better to watch these programs on television. In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from this program, television or radio v.1

Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it’s better to watch these programs on television. In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from this program, television or radio v. 1
Music is the soul of life. People proclaim that music is a good way of connecting people of different values and even ages I totally concur with the view that music goes beyond boundaries to bind the society at various levels. This essay will explain as to why music helps build strong bonds between various multicultural as well as between people of varied ages? . To embark upon, music can certainly bring the people together who have a distinct culture. This can be generally seen in case of popular songs; when a particular album becomes successful, it automatically makes a place in everyone’s heart no matter to which region the audience belong. To exemplify, songs of a famous Punjabi singer, Gurdas Maan, are admired by national and international audience regardless of culture. Moreover, playing western music at parties and dancing on it together, including children, youngsters and even elders can be usually observed because people enjoy the company from diverse cultures and age groups. In other words, all the differences between younger and older individuals are certain to disappear when they listen to the same music. Nevertheless, certain hindrances are inevitable while listening to music from various regions. If a person is not familiar with particular language and music style, he would not take interest in listening to such records. For instance, if not in all cases, mostly it has been noticed that old people tend to play traditional and classical music only rather than rock or pop, which is preferred by youth. In fact, frictions can be a consequence of objectionable and unacceptable lyrics, which are targeted towards a particular section of society. In conclusion, I reiterate that has the music magic of crossing socio-cultural limitations provided the linguistic and preference obstacles are addressed prudently.
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music
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good
way of connecting
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people
of
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different
values and even ages I
totally
concur with the view that
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music
goes beyond boundaries to bind the society at various levels. This essay will
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explain
as to why
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music
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helps
build strong bonds between various multicultural
as well
as between
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people
of varied ages?
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To embark upon,
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music
can
certainly
bring the
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people
together who have a distinct culture. This can be
generally
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seen
in case of popular songs; when a particular album becomes successful, it
automatically
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makes
a place in everyone’s heart no matter to which region the audience belong. To exemplify, songs of a
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famous
Punjabi singer,
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Gurdas
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Maan
,
are admired
by national and international audience regardless of culture.
Moreover
, playing western
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music
at parties and dancing on it together, including children, youngsters and even elders can be
usually
observed
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because
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people
enjoy the
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company
from diverse cultures and age groups.
In other words
, all the differences between younger and older individuals are certain to disappear when they listen to the same music.

Nevertheless
, certain hindrances are inevitable while listening to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
from various regions. If a person is not familiar with particular language and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
style, he would not take interest in listening to such records.
For instance
, if not in all cases,
mostly
it has
been noticed
that
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old
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people
tend to play traditional and classical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
music
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only
rather
than rock or pop, which
is preferred
by youth. In fact, frictions can be a consequence of objectionable and unacceptable lyrics, which
are targeted
towards a particular section of society.

In conclusion
, I reiterate that has the
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music
magic of crossing
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socio-cultural
limitations provided the linguistic and preference obstacles
are addressed
prudently
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it’s better to watch these programs on television. In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from this program, television or radio v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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