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Question: Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it's better to watch these programs on In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from the program, television or radio? U v.2

Question: Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it's better to watch these programs on In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from the program, television or radio? U v. 2
It is general believed that when information comes with visual image or video the brain can perceive fast and better the information. In other hand the radio may increase the imagination. In my opinion educational programs are more attractive and productive when they are showed on Tv. I think that for the reason below. First, the educational programs on TV are better than listened to on radio inasmuch as the information on Tv is easy understood. The Tv help to present the information illustration with images, videos and music that are put easy deep on brain. For instance one year ago, my university organized the third conference in accounting. The first recall for paper was announced on the radio, but I do not pay attention on it. Meanwhile after one day I saw the same recall on tv and the images and video about the topic of the conference was slight easy for me and I decide to go and being part of this educational program. Second, the images, the videos and the different diagrams used to transmit the message of the educational programs are more attractive and make the information more reliable. For example, parents are understanding better the problems causing by mobile phone to their children when they see videos and real fact on tv. In other hand this educational program on radio is not understood. Additional, the aim of the program to prevent the children by using the mobiles phone is not completed because of the wrong way to transmit it. In conclusion the aim and the information of the educational programs are easy perceive when they appear on television. Hence in my opinion the radio is less attractive and do not transmit the aim of the programs.
It is general believed that when
information
comes
with visual
image
or
video
the brain can perceive
fast
and better the
information
. In other hand the
radio
may increase the imagination. In my opinion
educational
programs
are more attractive and productive when they are
showed
on
Tv
. I
think
that for the reason below.

First
, the
educational
programs
on TV are better than listened to on
radio
inasmuch as the
information
on
Tv
is
easy
understood. The
Tv
help
to present the
information
illustration with
images
,
videos
and music that
are put
easy
deep on brain.
For instance
one year ago, my university organized the third conference in accounting. The
first
recall for paper
was announced
on the
radio
,
but
I do not pay attention on it.
Meanwhile
after one day I
saw
the same recall on
tv
and the
images
and
video
about the topic of the conference was slight
easy
for me and I decide to go and being part of this
educational
program.

Second, the
images
, the
videos
and the
different
diagrams
used
to transmit the message of the
educational
programs
are more attractive and
make
the
information
more reliable.
For example
, parents
are understanding
better the problems causing by mobile phone to their children when they
see
videos
and real fact on
tv
. In other hand this
educational
program
on
radio
is not understood. Additional, the aim of the
program
to
prevent
the children by using the mobiles phone is not completed
because
of the
wrong
way to transmit it.

In conclusion
the aim and the
information
of the
educational
programs
are
easy
perceive when they appear on television.
Hence
in my opinion the
radio
is less attractive and do not transmit the aim of the
programs
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Question: Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it's better to watch these programs on In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from the program, television or radio? U v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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