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Question: Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it's better to watch these programs on In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from the program, television or radio? U v.1

Question: Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it's better to watch these programs on In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from the program, television or radio? U v. 1
Leisure activities are a part of children's life and are practiced worldwide, but certain individuals think that the purpose of such activities should be educational or it will just be frittering away time. This essay will argue that leisure exercises are meant to give relief and must not include education. Certain demographics of society believe that activities done for fun at school should include education because they feel that children should be learning all the time in order to fit in this fast paced world and be ahead. For instance, a family in my neighbourhood admitted their child in school when he was only 2 years young and not only that, but they made him read books when other kids used to play outside. Since the competition has taken over parents' minds, they now consider educating the child in every way possible. Although some people are in favour of combining education and relaxation the fact can not be denied that leisure exercises are as important as studies. Activities like sports, rides and gardening must not include education but relief. An Italian psychologist, for example, conducted a survey in schools and found out that children who took part in sports performed better in studies than those who did not. Thus, free time bustle has its own benefits and must not be educational. In conclusion, this essay argued that even if people who support the idea of adding education to leisure time have their justifiable reasons this act is wrong and should not be practiced at all and studies and free time activities should be kept separated.
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Leisure
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activities
are a part of children's life and
are practiced
worldwide,
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but
certain individuals
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think
that the purpose of such
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activities
should be educational or it will
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just
be frittering away
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time
. This essay will argue that
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leisure
exercises
are meant
to give relief and
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must
not include education.

Certain demographics of society believe that
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activities
done for fun at school should include
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education
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because
they feel that children should be learning all the
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time
in order to fit in this
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fast
paced world and be ahead.
For instance
, a family in my
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neighbourhood
admitted their child in school when he was
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only
2 years young and not
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only
that,
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but
they made him read books when other kids
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used
to play outside. Since the competition has taken over parents' minds, they
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now
consider educating the child in every way possible.

Although
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some
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people
are in
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favour
of combining
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education
and relaxation the fact can not
be denied
that
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leisure
exercises are as
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important
as studies.
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Activities
like sports, rides and gardening
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must
not include
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education
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but
relief. An Italian psychologist,
for example
, conducted a survey in schools and found out that children who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
took part
in sports performed better in studies than those who did not.
Thus
, free
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time
bustle has its
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own
benefits and
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must
not be educational.

In conclusion
, this essay argued that even if
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people
who support the
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idea
of adding
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education
to
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leisure
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time
have their justifiable reasons this act is
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wrong
and should not
be practiced
at all and studies and free
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time
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activities
should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
separated.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Question: Some people think that educational programs are best understood when listened to on the radio while others think that it's better to watch these programs on In your opinion, which is the best way to learn from the program, television or radio? U v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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