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Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with family and friends or a lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends? Explain your choice, using specific reasons v. 1

It is thought that people of different ages have different shopping habits and these habits are dependent on which youth group they fit into rather than any other demographic. For me, it would really depend on the definition of ‘shopping habit’ is, as well as how the life groups are defined. I understand “shopping habits” to be any time you go out and spend money for whatever reason, not necessarily purely for clothes or food. This would include going to restaurants and perhaps the cinema or KTV as well as sports activities. I would probably define the maturity groups in blocks of 10 years. If this were the case, I can see some arguments that might support this statement due to the fact that people of different ages will buy different things and at different times, but I don’t believe it is solely due to their youth. For instance, some of my older friends, by about 5 years, are now married and some of them aren’t. Although they are the same old age their shopping habits are completely different. The ones that are married and are now living with their husbands rather than their parents are quite often going shopping for food or other things to do with home life, whereas my friends that are unmarried mainly shopping for clothes. Another example of why it is not the unique decider, is recreation activities that different people do. I am thinking of my friends that play sport with me, sometimes twice a week. Our squash club is made up of entirely different people, with youth ranges from 16 to 70; there are both women and men that play from all parts of the world including England, America, South Africa and China. So again, this “habit” has nothing at all to do with life. In conclusion, then I totally disagree with this statement as although youth might be a small contributing factor, it is certainly not the most important.

IELTS essay Which would you choose: a high-paying job with long hours that would give you little time with family and friends or a lower-paying job with shorter hours that would give you more time with family and friends? Explain your choice, using specific reasons v.1

It is
thought
that
people
of
different
ages have
different
shopping
habits
and these
habits
are dependent on which
youth
group they fit into
rather
than any other demographic.

For me, it would
really
depend on the definition of
‘shopping
habit’
is,
as well
as how the life groups
are defined
. I understand
“shopping
habits”
to be any time you go out and spend money for whatever reason, not
necessarily
purely
for clothes or food. This would include going to restaurants and perhaps the cinema or
KTV
as well
as sports activities. I would
probably
define the maturity groups in blocks of 10 years.

If this were the case, I can
see
some
arguments that might support this statement due to the fact that
people
of
different
ages will
buy
different
things and at
different
times,
but
I don’t believe it is
solely
due to their
youth
.
For instance
,
some
of my older friends, by about 5 years, are
now
married and
some
of them aren’t.
Although
they are the same
old
age their
shopping
habits
are completely
different
. The ones that
are married
and are
now
living with their husbands
rather
than their parents are quite
often
going
shopping
for food or other things to do with home life, whereas my friends that
are unmarried
mainly
shopping
for clothes.

Another example of why it is not the unique decider, is recreation activities that
different
people
do. I am thinking of my friends that play sport with me,
sometimes
twice a week. Our squash club
is made
up of
entirely
different
people
, with
youth
ranges from 16 to 70; there are both women and
men
that play from all parts of the world including England, America, South Africa and China.
So
again, this
“habit”
has nothing at all to do with life.

In conclusion
, then I
totally
disagree with this statement as although
youth
might be a
small
contributing factor, it is
certainly
not the most
important
.
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