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Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views v.1

Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. 1
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people
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Some
individuals are of the opinion that the cyberspace is more attractive
rather
than
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television
.
Similarly
, I clinch this assertion, and I will
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explain
why this statement is viable according to me.

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Let
us understand the reason why the World Wide Web is preferable among the folks.
Firstly
, the primary convenient fact is better
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communication
. By using the information from the internet each individual can connect with their
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favourite
person, and it costs less amount of money.
Besides
, educational improvement is one more reliable fact which cannot be
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ignored
as well
. Educational institutions, where the student learns lessons,
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use
the internet for making lectures, announcing results in online, distributing
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class
schedules, and
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so
on. Apart from this, entertainment is another valuable issue
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because
by consuming the internet,
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people
enjoy movies, dramas, videos, etc. Recent statistics
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showed
that, in Bangladesh, over 97% of folks are using the internet for
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communication
purposes.

On the other flip of the coin, it is irrefutable that
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television
is the oldest discovery, which gave enjoyment for a few decades
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before
internet creation.
Moreover
,
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tv
delivers
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some
specific things.
Conversely
, the internet offers not
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only
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communication
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but
also
entertainment and knowledge.
For instance
,
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tv
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only
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uses
for watching the program, notwithstanding, the internet gives numerous convenient matters, which are useful for future life.

To conclude
, it is a reality that the internet
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changes
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people
's lifestyle more than
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television
.
Therefore
, folks are obtaining
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favours
from the cyberspace, such as
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communication
, entertainment, education, and
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so
on.
Thus
, in my perception, the internet develops public life systems more than
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television
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that developed countries have higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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