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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v. 1
In recent years, climate change climbs the political agenda of different western countries. Some people believe that developed countries should act to combat global warming, others consider that since climate change affects the whole planet; thus there is the need to have a global action. In one hand, developed countries used fossil fuels and other components since the first industrial revolution, and thanks to them reached the economic level and social security that enjoys now. For example, without carbons, there would not be the train rail that enhanced the transportation of goods and people, which favor international trade. Nevertheless, there were not scientific proofs regarding the consequences of these actions. Developed countries are currently trying to reduce CO2 emissions and to tackle global warming. However, the effort, for now, seems vain since developing countries are polling the air a lot. Thus, joint action should be taken. On the other hand, some people believed that developing countries should not be accountable for climate change which was initiated by western countries. Indeed, they need to use fossil fuel and other chemical agents which are dangerous for the planet, to develop them self and reach the same level of prosperity of the western civilizations. The BRICS sustains this argument, in fact, for instance, the spokesperson of China stated that western nations should have a significant impact in taking care of global warming and reversed it. In my opinion, we have a planet, and it is our responsibility to take care of it. While developed countries used fossil fuels for reaching this level of development, developing countries cannot do the same, because nowadays the consequences for the planet are known. Nevertheless, it is essential to support them in finding different ways to develop. Thus they will agree in globally tackling this issue.
In recent years, climate
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change
climbs the political agenda of
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different
western
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countries
.
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people
believe that
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developed
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countries
should act to combat
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global
warming, others consider that since climate
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change
affects the whole
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planet
;
thus
there is the need to have a
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global
action.

In one hand,
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developed
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countries
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used
fossil fuels and
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other
components since the
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first industrial revolution
, and thanks to them reached the economic level and social security that enjoys
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now
.
For example
, without carbons, there would not be the train rail that enhanced the transportation of
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goods
and
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people
, which favor international trade.
Nevertheless
, there were not scientific proofs regarding the consequences of these actions.
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Developed
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countries
are
currently
trying to
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reduce
CO2 emissions and to tackle
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global
warming.
However
, the effort, for
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now
, seems vain since developing
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countries
are polling the air a lot.
Thus
, joint action should
be taken
.

On the
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other
hand,
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some
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people
believed that developing
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countries
should not be accountable for climate
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change
which
was initiated
by western
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countries
.
Indeed
, they need to
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use
fossil fuel and
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other
chemical agents which are
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dangerous
for the
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planet
, to develop them self and reach the same level of prosperity of the western civilizations. The BRICS sustains this argument, in fact,
for instance
, the spokesperson of China stated that western nations should have a significant impact in taking care of
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global
warming and reversed it.

In my opinion, we have a
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planet
, and it is our responsibility to take care of it. While
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developed
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countries
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used
fossil fuels for reaching this level of development, developing
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countries
cannot do the same,
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because
nowadays the consequences for the
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planet
are known
.
Nevertheless
, it is essential to support them in finding
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different
ways to develop.
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Thus
they will
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agree
in globally tackling this issue.
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IELTS essay Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v. 1

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