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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.3

Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v. 3
Some argue that the wealthy nations of the world have a bigger responsibility in addressing climate change whereas, others think that it is equally the responsibility of a developing country as any developed country. I completely agree that the advanced economies of the world should do more to address global warming and change in climate as they are the major contributors to the problem and developing countries can only do a little because of resource constraints. Historically, the rich and the wealthy countries of the world, have been the major culprit in greenhouse gas emissions. Rapid industrialisation resulted in significant air pollution and environmental destruction resulting in rising global temperatures and melting polar ice-caps. Hence, it is their moral responsibility to do more in fighting the climate change and expecting rising and poor economies to share their problem is far from right. For example, the biggest contributors to global warming has been the US and the western Europe and rising economies like India and China have negligible contributions to the problem. Secondly, tackling climate change in an expensive affair. Switching over to renewable sources of energy and eco-friendly industries needs technological expertise and financial resources. Hence, expecting low and middle income countries to pitch in especially at time, when they are facing other bigger challenges such as poverty, malnutrition and unemployment is unfair. In addition, most of the impact of climate change is faced by the poor and smaller countries. For example, low lying poor countries such as Bangladesh see significant destruction from stronger and ever powerful cyclones occurring as a result of climate change. To conclude, developed countries need to help the poor ones by taking a major share of the burden to tackle this global concern.
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argue that the wealthy nations of the world have a bigger responsibility in addressing
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whereas, others
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the responsibility of a developing
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as any developed
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. I completely
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agree
that the advanced economies of the world should do more to address
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warming and
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change
in
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as they are the major contributors to the problem and developing
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countries
can
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do a
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of resource constraints.

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, the rich and the wealthy
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countries
of the world, have been the major culprit in greenhouse gas emissions. Rapid
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industrialisation
resulted in significant air pollution and environmental destruction resulting in rising
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global
temperatures and melting polar ice-caps.
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, it is their moral responsibility to do more in fighting the
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climate
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change
and expecting rising and
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poor
economies to share their problem is far from right.
For example
, the biggest contributors to
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global
warming has been the US and the
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western Europe
and rising economies like India and China have negligible contributions to the problem.

Secondly
, tackling
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climate
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change
in an expensive affair. Switching over to renewable sources of energy and eco-friendly industries needs technological expertise and financial resources.
Hence
, expecting low and middle income
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countries
to pitch in
especially
at time, when they are facing other bigger challenges such as poverty, malnutrition and unemployment is unfair.
In addition
, most of the impact of
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climate
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change
is faced
by the
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poor
and smaller
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countries
.
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,
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low lying
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poor
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countries
such as Bangladesh
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see
significant destruction from stronger and ever powerful cyclones occurring
as a result
of
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climate
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change
.

To conclude
, developed
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countries
need to
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help
the
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poor
ones by taking a major share of the burden to tackle this
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global
concern.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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