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Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison so as to reduce the crime rate To what extent do you agree or disagree v.2

Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison so as to reduce the crime rate v. 2
In recent days, many people explain that the time in prison should be increased in order to limit the crime rate. In my opinion, this way is effective to deter more cases but in some aspects, it seems not so effective or other measures are also appropriate for each situation. On the one hand, some people suggest extending imprison time for crimes for deterrent effect. Spending more time behind the metal bars may let crimes recognize and also regret about their fault in the past. Consequently, most of them may be aware of not repeating criminal after their times are expired, so we can inhibit a large number of crimes. Moreover, if the time in prison becomes longer, the staffs can apply more methods to improve prisoners’ awareness and rehabilitate them. As a result crime repeating tendency can be reduced, currently these ex-prisoners tell to community about their experience so as to discourage people commit a crime. On the other hands, this method may not effective for some circumstances. For example, many mafia have a tendency of continue their criminal career after they are released. In some cases, we need more stringent methods. For instance, some felonies like murder, drugs trading are really dangerous to the society and there are less hope to reform them so many countries tend to give them capital punishment instead of life imprisonment for deterrent effect. In conclusion, giving more time for crimes in prison is good idea to reduce more cases, but we need more strict techniques in some situations.
In recent days,
many
people
explain
that the
time
in prison should
be increased
in order to limit the
crime
rate. In my opinion, this way is effective to deter more cases
but
in
some
aspects, it seems not
so
effective or other measures are
also
appropriate for each situation.

On the one hand,
some
people
suggest extending imprison
time
for
crimes
for deterrent effect. Spending more
time
behind the metal bars may
let
crimes
recognize and
also
regret about their fault in the past.
Consequently
, most of them may be aware of not repeating criminal after their
times
are expired
,
so
we can inhibit
a large number of
crimes
.
Moreover
, if the
time
in prison becomes longer, the staffs can apply more methods to
improve
prisoners’ awareness and rehabilitate them.
As a result
crime
repeating tendency can be
reduced
,
currently
these ex-prisoners
tell
to community about their experience
so as to
discourage
people
commit a crime.

On the other hands, this method may not effective for
some
circumstances.
For example
,
many mafia
have a tendency of continue their criminal career after they
are released
. In
some
cases, we need more stringent methods.
For instance
,
some
felonies like murder, drugs trading are
really
dangerous
to the society and there are less hope to reform them
so
many
countries tend to give them capital punishment
instead
of life imprisonment for deterrent effect.

In conclusion
, giving more
time
for
crimes
in prison is
good
idea
to
reduce
more cases,
but
we need more strict techniques in
some
situations.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that criminals should be given longer terms in prison so as to reduce the crime rate v. 2

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  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
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