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Some people think that cities are the best places to live Others prefer to live in a rural area Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from v.1

Some people think that cities are the best places to live Others prefer to live in a rural area Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside 1
Humans have been damaging the climate ever since we realised our powers to harness nature. Global warming and air pollution are now frequent headlines on TV and in the newspapers all over the world, which keep reminding us of our obligation to protect the setting. However, few actions are actually being taken at the individual level, and I think there are two major reasons why people are being so indifferent. The first reason is that people consider the environmental problems as a future concern. Environmental reports often warn us of the dire consequences of climate change or energy crisis 100 or 200 years later. As a result, many people feel that money and time are better spent on solving more immediate problems such as housing shortage and traffic congestion than on preventing a disaster that is only predicted to happen in the future. Also, people feel that environmental problems are too complex for individual people to cope with. Indeed, a combination of factors causes environmental problems, many of which are impossible to be controlled through individual actions. The above attitudes are understandable, but are obviously mistaking, so the government needs to take proactive measure to make people more environmentally reasonable. They can make more public service advertisements to encourage people to consume more green products instead of disposable goods that are harmful to the climate. They can also offer more incentives to peop6 who have been active in cleaning up the neighbourhood or severely punish those who have been unfriendly to the setting. There is always s dilemma between surroundings and development. Certainly, we don't want to see the Earth turn into an uninhabitable planet.
Humans have been damaging the climate ever since we
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realised
our powers to harness nature. Global warming and air pollution are
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now
frequent headlines on TV and in the newspapers all over the world, which
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keep
reminding us of our obligation to protect the setting.
However
, few actions are actually
being taken
at the individual level, and I
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think
there are two major reasons why
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people
are being
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so
indifferent.

The
first
reason is that
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people
consider the
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environmental
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problems
as a future concern.
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Environmental
reports
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often
warn us of the dire consequences of climate
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change
or energy crisis 100 or 200 years later.
As a result
,
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many
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people
feel that money and time are better spent on solving more immediate
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problems
such as housing shortage and traffic congestion than on preventing a disaster
that is
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only
predicted to happen in the future.
Also
,
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people
feel that
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environmental
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problems
are too complex for individual
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people
to cope with.
Indeed
, a combination of factors causes
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environmental
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problems
,
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many
of which are impossible to
be controlled
through individual actions.

The above attitudes are understandable,
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but
are
obviously
mistaking,
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so
the
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government
needs to take proactive measure to
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make
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people
more
environmentally
reasonable. They can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more public service advertisements to encourage
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to consume more green products
instead
of disposable
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goods
that are harmful to the climate. They can
also
offer more incentives to peop6 who have been active in cleaning up the
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neighbourhood
or
severely
punish those who have been
unfriendly
to the setting.

There is always s dilemma between surroundings and development.
Certainly
, we don't want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the Earth turn into an uninhabitable planet.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that cities are the best places to live Others prefer to live in a rural area Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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