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More and more people are finding it increasingly important to wear fashionable clothes Is this attitude to wearing clothes a positive or negative development v.1

More and more people are finding it increasingly important to wear fashionable clothes Is this attitude to wearing clothes a positive or negative development v. 1
Education is pioneer of student fortune. But some suitable & adequate students could not access to the universities. Some argue that wealthy and indigent both go through trouble in getting admission to the varsities. In my opinion, children from affluent families easily get admission into institutes. However, it is quite difficult for poor. To begin with, rich students have many chances to take a seat for higher study in institutions. In private organizations, they have reserved seats for wealthy families, students, that pays an enormous fee. In other words, if their child could not get higher grades, they provide donation and if institute don’t initiate for admission to their child, they have many notorious contacts to get access to the varsity. For example, even if the students do not get excel in academics they have influential contacts of trustees and recommendation of politicians might be aidful to them. In fact, with this privilege, their children can get admission effortless. On the other hand, youngster with non-affluent family background or no top influences might be hard to accessibility. Poor students could get scholarships, but for limited students only. It’s an arduous way for poor to deal with these conditions. According to Hindustan Unilever movement named “Shiksha”, 30% of Indian intellectuals, students could not get access to the universities due to circumstances related to money. Finally, it is easier to accessibility into educational organizations for magnate families’ children, it’s difficult for indigent children. No matter what, education is everywhere, if you could not get admission in institutes, does not mean that your future will be blurry. Try to find your own ways to get information.
Education is pioneer of
student
fortune.
But
some
suitable & adequate
students
could not access to the universities.
Some
argue that wealthy and indigent both go through trouble in getting
admission
to the varsities. In my opinion,
children
from affluent
families
easily
get
admission
into institutes.
However
, it is quite difficult for poor.

To
begin
with, rich
students
have
many
chances to take a seat for higher study in institutions. In private organizations, they have reserved seats for wealthy
families
,
students
, that pays an enormous fee.
In other words
, if their child could not
get
higher grades, they provide donation and if institute don’t initiate for
admission
to their child, they have
many
notorious contacts to
get
access to the varsity.
For example
, even if the
students
do not
get
excel in academics they have influential contacts of trustees and recommendation of politicians might be
aidful
to them. In fact, with this privilege, their
children
can
get
admission
effortless.

On the other hand
, youngster with non-affluent
family
background or no top influences might be
hard
to accessibility. Poor
students
could
get
scholarships,
but
for limited
students
only
. It’s an arduous way for poor to deal with these conditions. According to Hindustan Unilever movement named “
Shiksha
”, 30% of Indian intellectuals,
students
could not
get
access to the universities due to circumstances related to money.

Finally
, it is easier to accessibility into educational organizations for magnate
families’
children
, it’s difficult for indigent
children
. No matter what, education is everywhere, if you could not
get
admission
in institutes, does not mean that your future will be blurry. Try to find your
own
ways to
get
information.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay More and more people are finding it increasingly important to wear fashionable clothes Is this attitude to wearing clothes a positive or negative development v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
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