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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v.2

Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v. 2
People have different opinions about living places. Certain people like to live in the country area while others choose to stay in the city centre. Each place offers its own benefits and drawbacks and the following essay will discuss them in detail. On the one hand, a group of people prefer to live in the city centre because they believe that there are a lot of benefits living in the area. It is a fact that the city offers various kinds of facilities, such as shopping malls, universities, cinemas, hospitals and restaurants, therefore it would not be difficult for the city’s residents in finding education centres, foods or entertainments. Cities offer more job opportunities as most of the companies and industries are situated there. Apart from that, there are certain facilities that are present only in city areas like amusement parks, large shopping malls, better schools etc. However, living in the city has some negative sides as well. The common drawbacks are that the crime and air pollution rate in the city are commonly higher than the rural area. Therefore some people choose to move out of the city centre. On the other hand, some people think that the best place to live is in the rural area. It is believed that people who live in these areas have a healthier life because they breathe fresher air, they eat more hygienic and natural fruits and vegetables and they live in a more relaxed and quite environment. As a result, their life expectancy is longer than those who live in cities or towns. Despite its positive sides, living in remote areas have some disadvantages. Several people found that the quality of education in these areas is left behind, while others feel that it is hard for them to develop their careers, therefore they choose to move to big cities. In conclusion, living in the city or the countryside has its own positive and negative sides, and it depends on the preference of each individual. I personally choose to live in the city area to enhance my career and plan to live in the countryside when I retire.
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places. Certain
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people
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. Each place offers its
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benefits and drawbacks and the following essay will discuss them in detail.

On the one hand, a group of
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people
prefer to
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live
in the city
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centre
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because
they believe that there are
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a lot of
benefits
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living
in the
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area
. It is a fact that the city offers various kinds of facilities, such as shopping malls, universities, cinemas, hospitals and restaurants,
therefore
it would not be difficult for the city’s residents in finding education
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centres
, foods or entertainments.
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Cities
offer more job opportunities as most of the
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companies
and industries
are situated
there. Apart from that, there are certain facilities that are present
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only
in city
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areas
like amusement parks, large shopping malls, better schools etc.
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,
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living
in the city has
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sides
as well
. The common drawbacks are that the crime and air pollution rate in the city are
commonly
higher than the rural
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.
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move
out of the city
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centre
.

On the other hand
,
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people
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that the best place to
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live
is in the rural
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area
. It
is believed
that
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people
who
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areas
have a healthier life
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they breathe fresher air, they eat more hygienic and natural fruits and
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vegetables and
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in a more relaxed and quite environment.
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, their life expectancy is longer than those who
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live
in
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cities
or towns. Despite its
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positive
sides,
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living
in remote
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disadvantages. Several
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people
found that the quality of education in these
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left
behind, while others feel that it is
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hard
for them to develop their careers,
therefore
they
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choose
to
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move
to
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big
cities.

In conclusion
,
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living
in the city or the countryside has its
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own
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positive
and
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sides, and it depends on the preference of each individual. I
personally
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choose
to
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live
in the city
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area
to enhance my career and plan to
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live
in the countryside when I retire.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
5.5
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