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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v.3

Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v. 3
These days, many people are quite concerned about choosing the right place to live their own life. In this essay, I will look at the pros and cons, aspects of living in large and crowded town compared to the countryside and draw a reasoned conclusion based on my ideas. One of the most significant benefits of settling in a city is health care. Usually, there is well-functioning health care system available to citizens of the town such as hospital and clinics, with many specialised doctors and healthcare professionals. For example, in the city, it is very convenient to find physicians, dentists and nurses. In contrast, often habitants of the rural area have to travel all the way to the city to visit the professionals in the city. As a result, people who live in the countryside suffer from the lack of health care laboratories, hospitals and chamber of professional doctors which are not close to them and is one of the reasons people prefer to stay closer to city centres. Furthermore, a city offers better educational, recreational and employment facilities which are quite tough to find in a rural area. However, the crime is the biggest challenge that inhabitants of a crowded city have to face. For example, murder, rape, theft, motor vehicle offence, drugs abuse, firearms & offensive weapon cases are more common in city areas than in a countryside. Even with criminal justice system and punishment by state law in cities, the rate of these heinous crimes is much higher there than any other part of the country such as villages and rural area. The rate of the crime is much less in a countryside than a city due to the less population and economic factors of that area. As a result, the people who live in a countryside are much protected against violation of their rights. In conclusion, both large towns and urban areas have some conveniences and drawbacks for its citizens.   Living location should ultimately be chosen depending on an individual's base on their professional job. For example, farmer ideally will choose the rural area and on the other hand, IT professional will prefer to be close to city centre.
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are quite concerned about choosing the right place to
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life. In this essay, I will look at the pros and cons, aspects of living in large and crowded town compared to the
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countryside
and draw a reasoned conclusion based on my
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ideas
.

One of the most significant benefits of settling in a city is health care.
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many
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doctors and healthcare
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convenient to find physicians, dentists and nurses.
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habitants of the
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rural
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area
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have to
travel all the way to the city to visit the
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in the city.
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who
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in the
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suffer from the lack of health care laboratories, hospitals and chamber of
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professional
doctors which are not close to them and is one of the reasons
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people
prefer to stay closer to city
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Furthermore
, a city offers better educational, recreational and employment facilities which are quite tough to find in a
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area.

However
, the crime is the biggest challenge that inhabitants of a crowded city
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face.
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, murder, rape, theft, motor vehicle
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, drugs abuse, firearms & offensive weapon cases are more common in city
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areas
than in a
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countryside
. Even with criminal justice system and punishment by state law in
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cities
, the rate of these heinous crimes is much higher there than any other part of the country such as villages and
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rural
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area
. The rate of the crime is much less in a
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countryside
than a city due to the less population and economic factors of that
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area
.
As a result
, the
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people
who
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in a
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countryside
are much protected against violation of their rights.

In conclusion
, both large towns and urban
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areas
have
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some
conveniences and drawbacks for its citizens.
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Living location should
ultimately
be chosen
depending on an individual's base on their
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professional
job.
For example
, farmer
ideally
will choose the
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rural
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area
and
on the other hand
, IT
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professional
will prefer to be close to city
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centre
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
365 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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