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Some People think that all school should learn a foreign language. Others think that a student should not be required to learn a foreign language if he or she does not have talent for it. v.1

Some People think that all school should learn a foreign language. Others think that a student should not be required to learn a foreign language if he or she does not have talent for it. v. 1
It is believed that living in the fast developing and focused technology word allows studying abroad while in the earlier time it was less impossible. However, this chance has advantages as well as disadvantages and this essay will consider both of them. On the one side, those who tend to think that studying abroad is considered an advantage cite on various aspects. First of all, the main benefit which students might get from studying at a non-local university is networking. An example might be seen as involving in different studying environment allows being connected with people who have a background and views of life dissimilar of you, which could be positive into developing students' attitude for life. Another positive aspect of studying in a foreign country is a chance to be engaged in another culture, which also might bring to students a different view of life and allows enhancing knowledge of other people. On the other side, there is a key drawback of a foreign country to student, which can overwrite the positive aspects of life in it. Without doubt studying abroad might be stressful for students and can be caused by loneliness and in some cases might trigger depression. After arriving in a new country students have to adjust to a new environment which might take in some situation for a few months. What is more, this state of unfamiliar with surroundings does not permit to be fully focused on learning which can be caused of future issues for students. Overall, despite the positive fact that the foreign education admits to enhancing the view of words and understanding the difference between countries, there are some aspects which could be considered as insurmountable for students.
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that living in the
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developing and focused technology word
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allows
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studying
abroad while in the earlier time it was less impossible.
However
, this chance has advantages
as well
as disadvantages and this essay will consider both of them.

On the one side, those who tend to
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that
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studying
abroad
is considered
an advantage cite on various
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aspects
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students
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might
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get
from
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at a non-local university is networking. An example
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different
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studying
environment
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allows
being connected
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people
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life
dissimilar of you, which could be
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positive
into developing students' attitude for
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life
. Another
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positive
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aspect
of
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studying
in a foreign
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country
is a chance to
be engaged
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also
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bring to
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students
a
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different
view of
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life
and
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allows
enhancing knowledge of other
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people
.

On the other side, there is a key drawback of a foreign
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country
to
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student
, which can overwrite the
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positive
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aspects
of
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life
in it. Without doubt
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studying
abroad
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might
be stressful for
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students
and can
be caused
by loneliness and in
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some
cases
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might
trigger depression. After arriving in a new
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country
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students
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have to
adjust to a new environment which
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take in
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situation for a few months.
What is more
, this state of unfamiliar with surroundings does not permit to be
fully
focused on learning which can
be caused
of future issues for students.

Overall
, despite the
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positive
fact that the foreign education admits to enhancing the view of words and understanding the difference between
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countries
, there are
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aspects
which could
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students
.
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IELTS essay Some People think that all school should learn a foreign language. Others think that a student should not be required to learn a foreign language if he or she does not have talent for it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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