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Some people think that cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compared the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v.2

Some people think that cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compared the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v. 2
In recent years, many individuals assume that it is better to locate their home in urban areas. Although some people are opposed to this opinion, I think that settling in metropolises has both benefits and downsides compared to living in the outlying areas. Those who are opposed to living in large cities have their own reasons based on the drawbacks of that. The first concern is air quality ruin. Every day, there are numberous vehicles on the road, releasing a significant amount of exhausted fumes into the surroundings. In long run, the air quality is getting worse and citizens may suffer from some dangerous diseases such as lung cancer or other lung-related illnesses. Secondly, the cost of living in urban areas is by far higher than that in the countryside. For example, the cost on housing is many times as much as that in rural areas. As a result, dwellers may find it difficult to save and spend money reasonably for their living. Despite the aforementioned drawbacks, settling in cities also has advantages. Firstly, the job market there is wider. There is a variety of occupations ranging from manual jobs to intellectual ones, which opens many chances for people. Another advantage is the service and infrastructure are more concerned in cities, urban children may have more opportunities to receive qualified academic education than those who are living in outlying areas. Undoubtedly, without well-developed infrastructure, the economy of that city or even the country may not be improved. In conclusion, although people living in large cities might face several downsides, they also receive the benefits from that compared to those who are living in countryside.
In recent years,
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many
individuals assume that it is better to locate their home in urban
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areas
. Although
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some
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people
are opposed
to this opinion, I
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think
that settling in metropolises has both benefits and downsides compared to
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living
in the outlying areas.

Those who
are opposed
to
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living
in large
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cities
have their
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own
reasons based on the drawbacks of that. The
first
concern is air quality ruin. Every day, there are
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numberous
vehicles on the road, releasing a significant amount of exhausted fumes into the surroundings. In long run, the air quality is getting worse and citizens may suffer from
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some
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dangerous
diseases such as lung cancer or other lung-related illnesses.
Secondly
, the cost of
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living
in urban
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areas
is by far higher than that in the countryside.
For example
, the cost on housing is
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many
times as much as that in rural
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areas
.
As a result
, dwellers may find it difficult to save and spend money
reasonably
for their living.

Despite the aforementioned drawbacks, settling in
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cities
also
has advantages.
Firstly
, the job market there is wider. There is a variety of occupations ranging from manual jobs to intellectual ones, which opens
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many
chances for
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people
. Another advantage is the service and infrastructure are more concerned in
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cities
, urban children may have more opportunities to receive qualified academic education than those who are
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living
in outlying
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areas
.
Undoubtedly
, without well-developed infrastructure, the economy of that city or even the country may not be
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improved
.

In conclusion
, although
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people
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living
in large
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cities
might face several downsides, they
also
receive the benefits from that compared to those who are
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living
in countryside.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Compared the advantages and disadvantages of living in the city to living in the countryside. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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