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Some people think that children would benefit if they attend nursery school before primary school while some people think that children should stay all day with their families. v.3

No doubt, parents are first teacher of their children but most of time, they spend in schools. A certain group of people believe that teenagers should go to school while starting their further education, whereas others opposite this. I, however, strongly reckon that nursery school have a lots of benefits. This essay will explicate both views in next paragraphs. Generally, kid school have numerous of merits. Firstly, young one's can learn basic education from kinder garten such as how to write and how to hold pencil. To add to more, they can learn starting syllabus in this school such as counting and alfabets. Moreover, children can aware about the situation because in primary school, they would need to spend time with strangers like teachers. Consequently, it can help to utilise time with outside. Additionally, they can learn, how to behave with others, good habits as well. Nevertheless, advocates of families who cogitate that youngsters should spend time in families while going to primary school due to they can learn moral values from their parents and also it can teach children such as they can learn better in families owing to comfortable and friendly way. Furthermore, youngsters can learn many things from family such ad basic knowledge because in nursery school children can learn only educational things but in family, they can learn other things like, respect elders, which is good and bad from them as well. Some people, however, might argue that families are best way to teachers of children but I firmly consider that nursery school can better starting for kids due to they can learn educational things which would bear good fruits to children for their academic study. In conclusion, nursery school, not only tremendous start up of study, but aslo children know about situation that what would happen in primary schools. It can aslo mitigate alone with others.
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first
teacher of their
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children
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but
most of
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time
, they spend in
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schools
. A certain group of
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people
believe that
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teenagers
should go to
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school
while starting their
further
education, whereas others opposite this. I,
however
,
strongly
reckon that
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nursery
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school
have
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a lots
of benefits. This essay will explicate both views in
next
paragraphs.

Generally
, kid
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school
have numerous of merits.
Firstly
, young one's can
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learn
basic education from
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kinder garten
such as how to write and how to hold pencil. To
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add
to more, they can
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learn
starting syllabus in this
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school
such as counting and
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alfabets
.
Moreover
,
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children
can aware about the situation
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because
in primary
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school
, they would need to spend
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time
with strangers like teachers.
Consequently
, it can
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help
to
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utilise
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time
with outside.
Additionally
, they can
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learn
, how to behave with others,
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good
habits
as well
.

Nevertheless
, advocates of
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families
who cogitate that youngsters should spend
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time
in
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families
while going to primary
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school
due to they can
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learn
moral values from their parents and
also
it can teach
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children
such as they can
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learn
better in
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families
owing to comfortable and friendly way.
Furthermore
, youngsters can
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learn
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many
things from
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family
such ad basic knowledge
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because
in
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nursery
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school
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children
can
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learn
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only
educational things
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but
in
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family
, they can
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learn
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other
things like, respect elders, which is
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good
and
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from them
as well
.
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Some
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people
,
however
, might argue that
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families
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are best
way to teachers of
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children
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but
I
firmly
consider that
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nursery
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school
can better starting for kids due to they can
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learn
educational things which would bear
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good
fruits to
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children
for their academic study.
In conclusion
,
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nursery
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school
, not
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only
tremendous
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start
up of study,
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but
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aslo
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children
know about situation that what would happen in primary
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schools
. It can
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aslo
mitigate alone with others.
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IELTS essay Some people think that young children benefits from going to the nursery school before starting primary school. Other think that it is better for young children to stay all day with the family.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
311 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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