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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individuals and for society. Do you agree or disagree? v.5

It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individuals and for society. v. 5
It is common to see people getting married in their thirties or over. However, some people contend that they should get married before they turn 30 because it is beneficial for themselves and the society. I completely disagree with this view for two primary reasons. Young couples who rush to get married tend to have a high probability of getting a divorce which is in most cases due to lack of experience. Broken families prevent children from growing up in a healthy environment. As a result, this can create social problems when children do not receive enough support from family, and they may even get involved in criminal offences outside. The taxpayers, thus, will have to waste their money dealing with these social issues instead of spending it on economic development. Another issue of getting married at a young age is that it can lead to serious financial problems. Many youngsters who are in their twenties are usually people who recently graduated from the university. These people who just get some job may not have enough money since it takes time to gain work experience after which they can be promoted. That is why, they are likely to struggle to financially support their family, especially if they are expecting a baby. In conclusion, I strongly disapprove of joining in matrimony earlier than the age of 30 in the light of possible dysfunctional family and their low income. I hope that these consequences will be taken into account before marrying.
It is common to
see
people
getting married in their thirties or over.
However
,
some
people
contend that they should
get
married
before
they turn 30
because
it is beneficial for themselves and the society. I completely disagree with this view for two primary reasons.

Young couples
who
rush to
get
married tend to have a high probability of getting a divorce which is
in most cases
due to lack of experience. Broken
families
prevent
children from growing up in a healthy environment.
As a result
, this can create social problems when children do not receive
enough
support from
family
, and they may even
get
involved in criminal
offences
outside. The taxpayers,
thus
, will
have to
waste their money dealing with these social issues
instead
of spending it on economic development.

Another issue of getting married at a young age is that it can lead to serious financial problems.
Many
youngsters
who
are in their twenties are
usually
people
who
recently graduated from the university. These
people
who
just
get
some
job may not have
enough
money since it takes time to gain work experience after which they can
be promoted
.
That is
why, they are likely to struggle to
financially
support their
family
,
especially
if they are expecting a baby.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
disapprove of joining in matrimony earlier than the age of 30 in the light of possible dysfunctional
family
and their low income. I hope that these consequences will
be taken
into account
before
marrying.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individuals and for society. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
249 words
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6.5
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