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Some people think that children with different abilities should be taught together while some think that intelligent children should be given special training or taught separately. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people think that children with different abilities should be taught together while some think that intelligent children should be given special training or taught separately. v. 2
People' s attitudes towards whether talented children should be taught with other children are different. While some of them think that they should be taught separately, my opinion is that talents should have courses with other children and I will analyse it in this essay. It is understandable that people think children with special abilities should be solely taught. Firstly, if geniuses are taught with other less-talented ones, their special abilities cannot fully exert, which would be a huge pity. For example, if a child who is extremely good at painting but not been sent to a special painting class, his merit might not be fulfilled and eventually he is likely to become mediocre. Besides, an unstreamed class with children in different levels cannot ensure the quality of knowledge imparting, the teacher may repeat several times for those less-talented pupils and this will be a waste of time for those eminent ones. This would cause low-efficiency in a class, which also be a waste of resource. However, the aim of education should not only focus on pursuing high academic scores, but also form well-rounded personalities. Children who are not excellent at learning may also have other advantages, which is worthy for those talented ones to learn from. In order to improve children' s social skills, it is reasonable to mix them in the same class. This can also encourage the talented children to help others in terms of learning. Furthermore, being taught solely may also lead to some psychological problems for those talented children. For example, some children become introvert or even socialphobia due to attending separated class and this is definitely adverse for their future development. Therefore, it is acceptable to build up some elective courses for schools to cater for those talented students to have further and more specialised learning. In conclusion, for the sake of children' s healthier growing up both physically and mentally, they should not been taught or trained separately. But it is appropriate for them to choose specialised electives to achieve their talents.
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talented
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children
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other
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children
are
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different
. While
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some
of them
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think
that they should
be taught
separately
, my opinion is that talents should have courses with
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other
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children
and I will
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analyse
it in this essay.

It is understandable that
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people
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think
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children
with special abilities should be
solely
taught.
Firstly
, if geniuses
are taught
with
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other
less-talented
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ones
, their special abilities cannot
fully
exert, which would be a huge pity.
For example
, if a child who is
extremely
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good
at painting
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but
not been
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sent
to a special painting
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class
, his merit might not
be fulfilled
and
eventually
he is likely to become mediocre.
Besides
, an
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unstreamed
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class
with
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children
in
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different
levels cannot ensure the quality of knowledge imparting, the teacher may repeat several times for those less-talented pupils and this will be a waste of time for those eminent
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ones
. This would cause low-efficiency in a
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class
, which
also
be a waste of resource.

However
, the aim of education should not
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only
focus on pursuing high academic scores,
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but
also
form well-rounded personalities.
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Children
who are not excellent at learning may
also
have
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other
advantages, which is worthy for those
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talented
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ones
to learn from. In order to
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improve
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children&
#039; s social
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skills
, it is reasonable to mix them in the same
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class
. This can
also
encourage the
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talented
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children
to
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help
others in terms of learning.
Furthermore
,
being taught
solely
may
also
lead to
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some
psychological problems for those
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talented
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children
.
For example
,
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some
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children
become introvert or even
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socialphobia
due to attending separated
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class
and this is definitely adverse for their future development.
Therefore
, it is acceptable to build up
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some
elective courses for schools to cater for those
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talented
students to have
further
and more
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specialised
learning.

In conclusion
, for the sake of
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children&
#039; s healthier growing up both
physically
and mentally, they should not
been taught
or trained
separately
.
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But
it is appropriate for them to choose
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specialised
electives to achieve their talents.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that children with different abilities should be taught together while some think that intelligent children should be given special training or taught separately. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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