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It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. v.1

It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. v. 1
In the past in many educational institutions children have been taught together based on their age regardless of intellectual ability displayed at schools. Alternatively, a large proportion of the population believes there should be a strong move towards the separation of children of different intellectual capabilities in current educational institutions. From my own educational perspective, I honestly believe that younger students possessing higher intelligence levels than their peers ought to be separated into alternative levels based on their gift, for a number of reasons. Admittedly, although young learners have the chance to learn a lot from associating with classmates their own age, it is widely believed that such a process isn’t considered to be vital for a healthy educational upbringing. The argument for intellectual separation holds some strong advantages. Firstly, by allocating students to classes based on levels of intelligence, high achievers have the opportunity to excel in a way that they couldn’t in a normal class. Owing to the fact that they can be placed into an unrestricted educational environment, students can excel with intellectual freedom. Secondly, there is a strong argument in regards to inhibiting a child’s intellectual growth by restricting them from moving above their peers if their mental capability permits. Why should we limit the intelligence of our future generation? For instance, many of today’s highly successful artists and entrepreneurs in the world have come from an unrestricted educational background and have been allowed to explore their mind and careers to the fullest extent. In conclusion, although I believe an educational environment for young learners should promote equal opportunity, I honestly think that creating a more liberal environment which enhances the learning capabilities of intellectually-gifted children will not only benefit individual’s careers but future society as a whole.
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intellectual
ability displayed at schools.
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move
towards the separation of children of
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intellectual
capabilities in
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current
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educational
institutions. From my
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educational
perspective, I
honestly
believe that younger students possessing higher intelligence levels than their peers ought to
be separated
into alternative levels based on their gift, for a number of reasons.

Admittedly
, although young learners have the chance to learn a lot from associating with classmates their
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own
age, it is
widely
believed that such a process isn’t considered to be vital for a healthy
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educational
upbringing. The argument for
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intellectual
separation holds
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some
strong advantages.
Firstly
, by allocating students to classes based on levels of intelligence, high achievers have the opportunity to excel in a way that they couldn’t in a normal
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class
. Owing to the fact that they can
be placed
into an unrestricted
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educational
environment, students can excel with
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intellectual
freedom.

Secondly
, there is a strong argument
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in regards to
inhibiting a child’s
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intellectual
growth by restricting them from moving above their peers if their mental capability permits. Why should we limit the intelligence of our future generation?
For instance
,
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of
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today
’s
highly
successful artists and entrepreneurs in the world have
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come
from an unrestricted
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educational
background and have been
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allowed
to explore their mind and careers to the fullest extent.

In conclusion
, although I believe an
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educational
environment for young learners should promote equal opportunity, I
honestly
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think
that creating a more liberal environment which enhances the learning capabilities of
intellectually
-gifted children will not
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only
benefit individual’s careers
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future society as a whole.
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IELTS essay It is widely believed that children of different levels of intelligence should be taught together, while others think that more intelligent children should be taught separately. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
292 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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