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Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. v. 1
Basic age limit for a child, to send him/her to the school is an ongoing debate issue from olden days. Most of them argue six or seven is the best period of their age for sending them to study. While others supports the idea of joining them in the school as young as possible. This essay will point out both the ideas with a specified example. First. Children at the age of six, before going to school has spent their young age with the parents and the family, developed many skills by a looking at their older ones. They mostly develop creative thinking by playing lots of games, but limits the academic skills. Moreover, they enjoy the parental care within six years. Furthermore, these children in school tend to show wide range of skills compared to other. For instance, a child joined at age of six has many skills like drawing, swimming which are not a part of academics. On the other side, schooling at a young ageage will also have many positive aspects of the growth. These kids have an ability to learn the things very fast. secondly, they are guided from a young ageage to develop all the academic skills. Although they did their schooling at a young ageage, they have a chance to compete with children of higher age compared to them. For example, comparing two children of age three and six joined in the same school, three year kid will have a chance to compete with six year kid and also has age to finish school early. In conclusion, In this busy world, both the parents are working hard and there is no time to parent their kids, and they are opting for child play schools. I support the idea of sending children to school at a young ageage, as it has many positive sides compared to other.
Basic
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limit for a child, to
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send
him/her to the
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is an ongoing debate issue from olden days. Most of them argue six or seven is the best period of their
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age
for sending them to study.
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others supports the
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idea
of joining them in the
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school
as
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young
as possible. This essay will point out both the
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ideas
with a specified example.

First
.
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Children
at the
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age
of six,
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before
going to
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school
has spent their
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young
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age
with the parents and the family, developed
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many
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skills
by a looking at their older ones. They
mostly
develop creative thinking by playing lots of games,
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but
limits the academic
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skills
.
Moreover
, they enjoy the parental care within six years.
Furthermore
, these
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children
in
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school
tend to
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show
wide range of
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compared to
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.
For instance
, a child
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joined
at
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of six has
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many
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skills
like drawing, swimming which are not a part of academics.

On the
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other
side, schooling at a
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ageage
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positive
aspects of the growth. These
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kids
have an ability to learn the things
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very
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fast
.
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secondly
, they
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from a
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to develop all the academic
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skills
. Although they did their schooling at a
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, they have a chance to compete with
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children
of higher
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age
compared to them.
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, comparing two
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children
of
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three and six
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joined
in the same
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, three year
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will have a chance to compete with six year
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and
also
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to finish
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early.

In conclusion
, In this busy world, both the parents are working
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hard
and there is no time to parent their
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kids
, and they are opting for child play
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schools
. I support the
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idea
of sending
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children
to
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school
at a
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young
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ageage
, as it has
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many
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positive
sides compared to
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9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that children should start school at the age of six or seven while others think that children should start school as young as possible. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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