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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v.19

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 19
The distinction between the right and the wrong definitely should begin in the initial years (opening sentence). I strongly believe that a system of rewards and punishments plays a vital role in a child’s learning since this helps the youngster distinguish between right and wrong. Towards this purpose parents and teachers should impose constructive punishments such as a social service or restricting some incentives I am of the opinion that without rewards and punishments, however, as many times children fail to differentiate between the moral and immoral behaviour. For example, some punishments such as refusing to give presents to children and restricting some benefits like play dates, the use of the TV, the Internet and any electronic device at home, as well as giving extra homework and social jobs such as helping other classmates and teachers and cleaning jobs during recess could be used by parents and teachers as lessons to show children that negative behaviour will always have negative consequences. Though parents may explain their child the reasons behind a moral behaviour, the child may not be in a position to understand the difference. Under such situations, mild punishments for a wrong behaviour and rewards for a right behaviour enable a child to make a distinction. Despite the need for punishment to teach a child, parents and teachers should make sure that the penalty is constructive in nature and not destructive. For instance, a child who misbehaves with parents should be made to spend some time in an old age home so that he develops a maturity to respect others. Similarly, courts often punish juveniles with social service for misdemeanours such as eve-teasing or getting into street brawls. A child should not be physically or mentally abused. Instead, he should be given punishments that enable him to realise his mistakes. In conclusion, punishment is necessary for the moral and ethical development of a child. If children are not given mild, constructive punishments or even withdrawing their perks they will not be able to understand the difference between good and bad. This will make a society less stable and sustainable.
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definitely should
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begin
in the initial years (opening sentence). I
strongly
believe that a system of rewards and
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punishments
plays a vital role in a
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child’s
learning since
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this
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helps
the youngster distinguish between right and
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wrong
. Towards this purpose
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parents
and
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teachers
should impose constructive
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punishments
such as a social service or restricting
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some
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incentives


I am of the opinion that without rewards and
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punishments
,
however
, as
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many
times
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children
fail to differentiate between the moral and immoral
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behaviour
.
For example
,
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some
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punishments
such

as refusing to give presents to
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children
and restricting
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some
benefits like play dates, the
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use
of the TV, the Internet and any electronic device at home,
as well
as giving extra homework and social jobs such

as helping other classmates and
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teachers
and cleaning jobs during recess could be
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used
by
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parents
and
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teachers
as lessons to
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show
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children
that
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negative
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behaviour
will always have
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negative
consequences. Though
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parents
may
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explain
their
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child
the reasons behind a moral
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behaviour
, the
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child
may not be in a position to understand the difference. Under such situations, mild
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punishments
for a
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wrong
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behaviour
and rewards for a right
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behaviour
enable a
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child
to
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make
a distinction.

Despite the need for
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punishment
to teach a
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child
,
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parents
and
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teachers
should
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make
sure that the penalty is constructive in nature and not destructive.
For instance
, a
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child
who misbehaves with
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parents
should
be made
to spend
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some
time in an
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old
age home
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so
that he develops
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a maturity
to respect others.
Similarly
, courts
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often
punish juveniles with social service for
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misdemeanours
such as eve-teasing or getting into street brawls. A
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child
should not be
physically
or mentally abused.
Instead
, he should be
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given
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punishments
that enable him to
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realise
his mistakes.

In conclusion
,
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punishment
is necessary for the moral and ethical development of a
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child
. If
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children
are not
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given
mild, constructive
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punishments
or even withdrawing their perks they will not be able to understand the difference between
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good
and
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bad
. This will
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make
a society less stable and sustainable.
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35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children? v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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