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Some people think that children should go to nursery schools before attending primary school, while others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that children should go to nursery schools before attending primary school, while others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. v. 1
A few areas in the globe depend on the world trip to provide revenue. Whereas, it creates some issues in the multi global trip if not handling properly. I write up the causes of these issues and solution, in this essay. Let us begin with, a few disadvantages in an international tour such as pollution, and lack of area. To elaborate, travel from the other nation develops specific troubles as the air and soil pollution because of overcrowded and throwing rubbish in the land. Moreover, additional use of natural resources like water, fuel, and energies leads to shortages in domestic people. In addition, due to overcrowding change to develop illegal activities among citizens. Thus, it is evident it has a few drawbacks. However, there are several advantages of multinational travel such as to improve the economic level of the countries, a person can be broad-minded, and gives employment options. So, the authority needs to take action against the important problem and put certain rules and regulations then it is manageable. While an individual has to follow for societal development. For instance, discarding waste in public place need to punish with a penalty. Give awareness regarding the importance of natural resources and limitation in the use. Thus, it is clear these problems can solve easier by reasonable solution. To conclude, I think there are enormous negatives in world tourism due to delinquency, but is solvable with an appropriate administration. There are several pragmatic methods are available to manage these difficulties like awareness and penalty.
A few areas in the globe depend on the world trip to provide revenue. Whereas, it creates
some
issues in the multi global trip if not handling
properly
. I write up the causes of these issues and solution, in this essay.

Let
us
begin
with, a few disadvantages in an international tour such as pollution, and lack of area. To elaborate, travel from the other nation develops specific troubles as the air and soil pollution
because
of overcrowded and throwing rubbish in the land.
Moreover
, additional
use
of natural resources like water, fuel, and energies leads to shortages in domestic
people
.
In addition
, due to overcrowding
change
to develop illegal activities among citizens.
Thus
, it is evident it has a few drawbacks.

However
, there are several advantages of multinational travel such as to
improve
the economic level of the countries, a person can be broad-minded, and gives employment options.
So
, the authority needs to take action against the
important
problem and put certain
rules
and regulations then it is manageable. While an individual
has to
follow for societal development.
For instance
, discarding waste in public place need to punish with a penalty. Give awareness regarding the importance of natural resources and limitation in the
use
.
Thus
, it is
clear
these problems can solve easier by reasonable solution.

To conclude
, I
think
there are enormous negatives in world tourism due to delinquency,
but
is solvable with an appropriate administration. There are several pragmatic methods are available to manage these difficulties like awareness and penalty.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that children should go to nursery schools before attending primary school, while others believe that is better for children to stay all day with their families. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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