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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. v. 1
People use various modes of transport to travel within a city. While some believe that a car is more convenient mode to do so, others feel that a bicycle is more efficient. I think that both the modes have some advantages and drawbacks, therefore one should choose depending on the distance which need to be covered. On the one hand, people who choose a car over a bicycle might argue that it is a faster mode of transport; hence it can help in saving a lot of time if a person needs to travel from one edge of the city to another. On the contrary, two wheelers are slower and are not fit for longer distances. For instance, one of my relatives lives around 10 kilometres away from my place. If I take a two-wheeler to reach there, it takes me around 1 hour to do so, but if I opt for a four-wheeler instead, I can reach there in approximately 30 minutes. Additionally, the cars can accommodate more people than a cycle. Therefore, if a family wants to travel together, cars are definitely a better option. On the other hand, cycles are environmentally friendly as they do not cause any air pollution, but cars emit carbon footprints. A recent survey conducted by the transport department of India concluded that if all the cars are replaced by bicycles, the air quality could be dramatically improved. Subsequently, bicycles are more cost effective and low maintenance as compared to the cars as they do not require a fuel refill and any frequent services. For example, a person who owns a bicycle can save up to 85% of the amount that is spent by a car owner on the maintenance of his vehicle. In conclusion, some people choose cars because they are faster mode of transport to be used in a city, other feel that bicycles are more environmentally efficient and can also save a lot of money. But I feel that both have some plus and minus; therefore for long distances cars should be used and cycles can be used for short distances.
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to travel within a city. While
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believe that a
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car
is more convenient
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mode
to do
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, others feel that a
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is more efficient. I
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that both the
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modes
have
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advantages and drawbacks,
therefore
one should choose depending on the
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distance
which need to
be covered
.

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people
who choose a
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car
over a
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bicycle
might argue that it is a faster
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mode
of
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transport
;
hence
it can
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help
in saving
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a lot of
time if a person needs to travel from one edge of the city to another.
On the contrary
,
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two wheelers
are slower and are not fit for longer
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.
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, one of my relatives
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around 10
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,
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if I opt for a four-wheeler
instead
, I can reach there in approximately 30 minutes.
Additionally
, the
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cars
can accommodate more
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people
than a cycle.
Therefore
, if a family wants to travel together,
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cars
are definitely a better option.

On the other hand
, cycles are
environmentally
friendly as they do not cause any air pollution,
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but
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cars
emit carbon footprints. A recent survey conducted by the
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transport
department of India concluded that if all the
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cars
are replaced
by
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bicycles
, the air quality could be
dramatically
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improved
.
Subsequently
,
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bicycles
are more cost effective and low maintenance as compared to the
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cars
as they do not require a fuel refill and any frequent services.
For example
, a person who
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owns
a
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bicycle
can save up to 85% of the amount that
is spent
by a
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car
owner on the maintenance of his vehicle.

In conclusion
,
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some
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people
choose
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cars
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because
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of
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transport
to be
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used
in a city, other feel that
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bicycles
are more
environmentally
efficient and can
also
save
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a lot of
money.
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I feel that both have
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some
plus and minus;
therefore
for long
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distances
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cars
should be
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used
and cycles can be
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used
for short
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distances
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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