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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. v. 7
The power individuals hold is so limited that the responsibility of environmental conservation should be allocated to the authorities. I completely disagree with this idea as both governments and individuals are accountable for protecting the earth. On the one hand, since politicians have a far-reaching influence over their countries and even the world, they might tackle serious environmental issues such as climate change or pollution more effectively. Firstly, governments can introduce laws and ensure that they are rigorously enforced. For example, the authorities impose heavy penalties on companies that violate illegal dumping laws. Secondly, they have sufficient resources as well as the financial means to do large-scale research and collect comprehensive data in order to find solutions to environmental concerns. In other words, governments can see the big picture and take reasonable steps to address the problems. On the other hand, I believe that individuals can play an important role in protecting the earth. There are a variety of habits to implement in everyday life which will make a huge difference. For instance, people should actively reduce their carbon footprint by using public transport instead of driving cars, minimizing purchases of heavily-packaged products or curbing the consumption of energy. Furthermore, authorities are not able to oversee or control the actions of all individuals. For example, although there are many campaigns aimed at educating people about the dangers of plastic pollution, the overuse of plastic still exists all over the world. Without the cooperation of citizens, regulations, however strict, would become pointless and environmental damage cannot be mitigated. In conclusion, due to the aforementioned reasons, the responsibility of conserving the earth belongs to not only politicians but also individuals.
The power
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individuals
hold is
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so
limited that the responsibility of
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environmental
conservation should
be allocated
to the authorities. I completely disagree with this
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idea
as both
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governments
and
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individuals
are accountable for protecting the earth.

On the one hand, since politicians have a far-reaching influence over their countries and even the world, they might tackle serious
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environmental
issues such as climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
or pollution more
effectively
.
Firstly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
can introduce laws and ensure that they are
rigorously
enforced.
For example
, the authorities impose heavy penalties on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
that violate illegal dumping laws.
Secondly
, they have sufficient resources
as well
as the financial means to do large-scale research and collect comprehensive data in order to find solutions to
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environmental
concerns.
In other words
,
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governments
can
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see
the
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big
picture and take reasonable steps to address the problems.

On the other hand
, I believe that
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individuals
can play an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in protecting the earth. There are a variety of habits to implement in everyday life which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a huge difference.
For instance
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
should
actively
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
their carbon footprint by using public transport
instead
of driving cars, minimizing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchases
of
heavily
-packaged products or curbing the consumption of energy.
Furthermore
, authorities are not able to oversee or control the actions of all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
.
For example
, although there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
campaigns aimed at educating
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
of plastic pollution, the overuse of plastic
still
exists all over the world. Without the cooperation of citizens, regulations,
however
strict, would become pointless and
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environmental
damage cannot
be mitigated
.

In conclusion
, due to the aforementioned reasons, the responsibility of conserving the earth belongs to not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
politicians
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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Grammatical Range: 8.5
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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