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some people think that big international sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. Do you agree or disagree? v.6

some people think that big international sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. v. 6
Massive international sporting events are not beneficial for the entertainer nation. It is assumed by some people that, sporting activities are not profitable to the manager provincial whereas, others believe it has a major positive influence on them. This essay will talk about why big international sporting tournaments are often beneficial to the host country. Firstly, It is argued that countries that presenter sporting events do not benefit from it. It is observed that, many countries invest money in new stadia and infrastructure (Housing, Museum e. t. c) As well as renovating outmoded recreative structures, which in turn reduces the agrarian's revenue. For example, In 1958, During the Munich air disaster, a ton of people lost their lives. Pressure was exerted on hospitals and clinics to support and improve lives, at the same time, hospital facilities had to be restocked to support the numerous lives at risk. In addition, the collapsed stadium had to be rebuilt, which rather costed the anchor nation which expected to earn, although, alms was given by other neighbouring countries. These may occur on rare occasions, but they are some reasons why a rustic may not benefit from hosting a sporting event. Conversely, countries achieve an area of income when they host a sporting activity. Depending on the number of countries participating, each provincial involved, flies a number of people to support their homey into fulfilling their aim of being part of the event. For example, In the 2018 Olympic games, over a population of 9, 000, 000 people had the opportunity to visit South Korea, a bucolic with a beautiful and interesting history of ancient times. The country has about 25 Museums and over 40 hostels and restaurants which made quite a lot of earnings during this period. During big international events, countries earn a portion of revenue with regards to the number of visitors, in spite of the money invested to moderator these programs. In conclusion, it is obvious for the anchor nation to double its income during these sporting activities. Entertainer parties may be crushed down by unforeseen circumstances, which are most unusual, however, it is evident that during these events, the homey earns a portion of revenue from involving countries. Ultimately, I disagree with the fact that big international sporting events are not worthwhile for the anchor country.
Massive
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international
sporting
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events
are not beneficial for the entertainer nation. It
is assumed
by
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some
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people
that, sporting activities are not profitable to the manager provincial whereas, others believe it has a major
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positive
influence on them. This essay will talk about why
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big
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international
sporting tournaments are
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often
beneficial to the host country.

Firstly
, It
is argued
that
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countries
that presenter sporting
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events
do not benefit from it. It
is observed
that,
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many
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countries
invest money in new
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stadia
and infrastructure (Housing, Museum e. t. c)
As well
as renovating outmoded
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recreative
structures, which in turn
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reduces
the agrarian's revenue.
For example
, In 1958, During the Munich air disaster, a ton of
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people
lost their
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lives
. Pressure
was exerted
on hospitals and clinics to support and
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improve
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lives
, at the same time, hospital facilities had to
be restocked
to support the numerous
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lives
at
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risk
.
In addition
, the collapsed stadium had to be rebuilt, which
rather
costed the anchor nation which
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expected
to earn, although, alms was
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given
by other
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neighbouring
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countries
. These may occur on rare occasions,
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but
they are
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some
reasons why a rustic may not benefit from hosting a sporting
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event
.

Conversely
,
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countries
achieve an area of income when they host a sporting activity. Depending on the number of
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countries
participating, each provincial involved, flies a number of
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people
to support their homey into fulfilling their aim of being part of the
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event
.
For example
, In the 2018
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Olympic games
, over a population of 9, 000, 000
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people
had the opportunity to visit South Korea, a bucolic with a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
and interesting history of ancient times. The
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country
has about 25 Museums and over 40 hostels and restaurants which made quite
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a lot of
earnings during this period. During
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big
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international
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events
,
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countries
earn a portion of revenue
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
the number of visitors,
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in spite of
the money invested to moderator these programs.

In conclusion
, it is obvious for the anchor nation to double its income during these sporting activities. Entertainer parties may
be crushed
down by unforeseen circumstances, which are most unusual,
however
, it is evident that during these
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events
, the homey earns a portion of revenue from involving
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countries
.
Ultimately
, I
Consider using "disagree that".
disagree with the fact that
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big
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international
sporting
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events
are not worthwhile for the anchor
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country
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that big international sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
386 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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