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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree? v.8

Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. v. 8
Education has been evolving by leaps and bounds and providing children with new avenues while keeping students updated with the relevant skills and mindset. Therefore, a fair amount of people believe, challenging subjects such as mathematics and philosophy should be an optional choice in schools. I do not completely accord with it because these lessons have its values in shaping one future's skill and morals. To embark on, there are multiple reason why these subjects are taught to every child. First of all, mathematics trains students to think logically in solving problems and it is being used in many forms by other fields of studies. Namely, Phytagoras is used by the architects to calculate height of a building. Secondly, philosophy teaches students' core values such as ethics. An example for this, is during work life, where one is required to make business decisions where conscience is involved. However, undoubtedly, these subjects are difficult for some kids, as we know, not every kid are born with equal cognitive skills. Consequently. It may seem unfair to be evaluated equally with others. For example, kids, blessed with exceptional skills in arts, music and sports should not be compared to those join science Olympics. To conclude, mathematics and philosophy are challenging for some, however, in my opinion, enforcing all students to take these classes will teach at least a basic knowledge and to some, they will carry forward its values in their life. Given this situation, I think schools need to assess and observe every of its student and aware of what they need essentially.
Education has been evolving by leaps and bounds and providing children with new avenues while keeping
students
updated with the relevant
skills
and mindset.
Therefore
, a
fair
amount of
people
believe, challenging subjects such as mathematics and philosophy should be an optional choice in schools. I do not completely accord with it
because
these lessons have its values in shaping one future's
skill
and morals.

To embark on, there are multiple reason why these subjects
are taught
to every child.
First of all
, mathematics trains
students
to
think
logically
in solving problems and it is being
used
in
many
forms by other fields of studies.
Namely
,
Phytagoras
is
used
by the architects to calculate height of a building.
Secondly
, philosophy teaches students' core values such as ethics. An example for this, is during work life, where one
is required
to
make
business decisions where conscience
is involved
.

However
,
undoubtedly
, these subjects are difficult for
some
kids, as we know, not every kid
are born
with equal cognitive
skills
.
Consequently
. It may seem unfair to
be evaluated
equally
with others.
For example
, kids, blessed with exceptional
skills
in arts, music and sports should not
be compared
to those
join
science Olympics.

To conclude
, mathematics and philosophy are challenging for
some
,
however
, in my opinion, enforcing all
students
to take these classes will teach at least a basic knowledge and to
some
, they will carry forward its values in their life.
Given
this situation, I
think
schools need to assess and observe every of its
student
and aware of what they need
essentially
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
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