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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly, so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree? v.33

Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly, so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 33
People worldwide is increasingly becoming sick, nowadays. While some individuals argue that experimenting a disease and finding ways to cure is the best solution, others point out that, that can be really expensive and that it is always superior to adopt measures to prevent the disease. This essay will discuss why it is always better to put a stop to the sickness rather than nursing for it. In fact, there can be many backlogs for researching and finding ways to cure an illness. Firstly, it is a never ending process. For example, it is widely known that because of the changes in the way we live currently, new strands of bacteria or virus are forming much faster namely Corona and SARS. Secondly, as it is a continuous process, lots of money has to be pumped in for its operation, which in turn makes it very expensive. Thirdly, as it is about addressing the symptoms of an infection or disease, it could result in lower immunity, due to which people could be prone to more diseases. For instance, research has shown that people who have been on antibiotics for prolonged time have much lesser resistance compared to others. On the other hand, there are a lot of advantages for preventing an illness, before its occurrence. As prevention is about resisting different strains of pathogen from infecting the body, it helps build natural resistance, which in turn develops the overall immunity of the human body. To illustrate, it is a globally accepted fact that someone with a high resistance is less prone to infections. Thus, prevention is an integrated approach. Further, when the nation stays healthy, the authorities would have to spend much lesser for the treatment of various illnesses as well as for the research, that could help save billions of dollars. Hence, the government should focus more on taking measures for preventing diseases rather than on investing in its research and treatment. To conclude, in my view, there are more benefits for the government as well as the society at large, to take preventive measures than treating the sickness after its occurrence. Prevention is the only way forward to help the community, build a healthy society.
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People
worldwide is
increasingly
becoming sick, nowadays. While
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some
individuals argue that experimenting a
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disease
and finding
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ways
to cure is the best solution, others point out that, that can be
really
expensive and that it is always superior to adopt measures to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
disease
. This essay will discuss why it is always better to put a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
to the sickness
rather
than nursing for it.

In fact, there can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
backlogs for researching and finding
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ways
to cure an illness.
Firstly
, it is a never ending process.
For example
, it is
widely
known that
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because
of the
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changes
in the
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way
we
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live
currently
, new strands of bacteria or virus are forming much faster
namely
Corona and SARS.
Secondly
, as it is a continuous process, lots of money
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has to
be pumped
in for its operation, which in turn
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makes
it
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very
expensive.
Thirdly
, as it is about addressing the symptoms of an infection or
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disease
, it could result in lower immunity, due to which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could be prone to more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
.
For instance
, research has shown that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who have been on antibiotics for prolonged time have much lesser resistance compared to others.

On the other hand
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
advantages for preventing an illness,
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before
its occurrence. As prevention is about resisting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
strains of pathogen from infecting the body, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
build natural resistance, which in turn develops the
overall
immunity of the human body. To illustrate, it is a globally
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
fact that someone with a high resistance is less prone to infections.
Thus
, prevention is an integrated approach.
Further
, when the nation stays healthy, the authorities would
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend much lesser for the treatment of various illnesses
as well
as for the research, that could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
save billions of dollars.
Hence
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should focus more on taking measures for preventing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
diseases
rather
than on investing in its research and treatment.

To conclude
, in my view, there are more benefits for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
as well
as the society at large, to take preventive measures than treating the sickness after its occurrence. Prevention is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
way
forward to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
the community, build a healthy society.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly, so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. v. 33

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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