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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. v. 2

Subjects like Mathematics, Philosophy and others are compulsory subjects. The difficulty level of these are high as compared to some others, because of that some people think that these subjects should be optional rather than being compulsory. And personally I think these subjects should be a compulsory part of the syllabus. If any kid is facing problem in learning these topics, it’s because they are not working hard as compared to others, these courses are not difficult for everyone. Some of us are slow learner and there are others who can quickly grasp things. But our human mind is same for everyone, it’s just the thought process that differs among humans. Hard working and quick learning kids don’t face any issue relating to these topics. If these branches of studies are optional, most of the kids will choose to ignore them and future generations will be deprived of good scientists, mathematicians, doctors and engineers etc. May be the children are facing problems only at the initial stages, but with time, they can develop interests in subjects and they will achieve bigger things and our society as a whole will get benefits from this. Our educational culture should be systematic, if anyone facing trouble in adapting these subjects, teachers and parents should work with them and motivates them to face these, This will not only help them in studies but I will also a valuable life lesson. Because not everything is optional in life at some point we have to make tough life choices so this could be a practical lesson for them as well. I believe our education system, by keeping an eye on the future, should prepare them accordingly. If someone is not prepared for these difficulties, the extra effort needed to be done to make sure that these kids are ready to take whatever comes in front of them.

IELTS essay Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree? v.2

Subjects like Mathematics, Philosophy
and others
are compulsory subjects. The difficulty level of these are high as compared to
some
others,
because
of that
some
people
think
that these subjects
should
be optional
rather
than being compulsory. And
personally
I
think
these subjects
should
be a compulsory part of the syllabus. If any kid is facing problem in learning these topics, it’s
because
they are not working
hard
as compared to others, these courses are not difficult for everyone.
Some
of us are slow learner and there are others who can
quickly
grasp things.
But
our human mind is same for everyone, it’s
just
the
thought
process that differs among humans.
Hard working
and quick learning kids don’t face any issue relating to these topics. If these branches of studies are optional, most of the kids will choose to
ignore
them and future generations will
be deprived
of
good
scientists, mathematicians, doctors and engineers etc.
May be
the children are facing problems
only
at the initial stages,
but
with time, they can develop interests in
subjects and
they will achieve bigger things and our society as a whole will
get
benefits from this. Our educational culture
should
be systematic, if anyone facing trouble in adapting these subjects, teachers and parents
should
work with them and motivates them to face these, This will not
only
help
them in studies
but
I will
also
a valuable life lesson.
Because
not everything is optional in life at
some
point we
have to
make
tough life choices
so
this could be a practical lesson for them
as well
. I believe our education system, by keeping an eye on the future,
should
prepare them
accordingly
. If someone is not prepared for these difficulties, the extra effort needed to
be done
to
make
sure that these kids are ready to take whatever
comes
in front of them.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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311 words
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