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Some people think that art is essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.3

Educational system in most countries is becoming easier and easier every year. Students may choose limited number of courses and not study maths or science on advanced level; phones are allowed during the lessons; some countries in the world cancelled homework and so on, and so on. . . A lot of people, especially young learners, find this pace of learning comforting. Their reflections are based on phrases like “Why would a scientist need dates of all the Civil Wars in USA? ", or “Why would an artist need to know ways of logarithms solution? “. And I can partly agree with them. It’s quite clear that everyone needs to take basic courses including art, math, science, jurisprudence etc. If you ever met a man or a woman who had never heard of Vincent van Gogh or Mone in their entire life, would they make a good impression of an aware, intelligent person? The answer is pretty clear. No one says that person who doesn’t know about world-famous artists is a bad person, but there is never enough knowledge, right? To sum up, I suppose that basic art class is necessary to all the students. If someone wants to get into art, they can continue learning and take an additional advanced classes.
Educational system in most countries is becoming easier and easier every year. Students may choose limited number of courses and not study
maths
or science on advanced level; phones are
allowed
during the lessons;
some
countries in the world cancelled homework and
so
on, and
so
on.
.
.


A lot of
people
,
especially
young learners, find this pace of learning comforting. Their reflections
are based
on phrases like “Why would a scientist need dates of all the Civil Wars
in USA
?
"
, or “Why would an artist need to know ways of logarithms solution? “. And I can partly
agree
with them.

It’s quite
clear
that everyone needs to take basic courses including art, math, science, jurisprudence etc. If you ever met a
man
or a woman who had never heard of Vincent van Gogh or
Mone
in their entire life, would they
make
a
good
impression of an aware, intelligent person? The answer is pretty
clear
.

No one says that person who doesn’t know about world-
famous
artists is a
bad
person,
but
there is never
enough
knowledge, right?

To sum up, I suppose that basic art
class
is necessary to all the students. If someone wants to
get
into art, they can continue learning and take
an additional advanced classes
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it is a waste of time.

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