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With a growing world population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this? v.1

With a growing world population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this? v. 1
As the world population is rising, meeting the dietary needs of all people has become a matter of concern. Some people argue that growing more genetically modified food can tackle this issue. In my opinion, GM foods can solve this issue to a great extent but there are some other solutions as well for this problem. Genetic engineering can be used for increasing the food production. By changing the DNA structure, people can make crops more disease and pest resistant. When crops are not destroyed by diseases and pest, the yield will be more. In addition to this, more desirable features can be added to crops by genetic engineering. For example, by using genetic modification we can grow bigger fruits or vegetables. Nutritional value of crops could also be increased by genetically modifying the crops. However, GM crops have some drawbacks and depending more on them is not the right solution to this problem. When crops are manipulated to increase yield, certain natural nutritional contents may be lost and also, people may get allergies by consuming these kinds of foods. Because of these reasons it is unwise to depend too much on them. A better solution is to encourage all people to grow their food. If each family can grow enough food for themselves, food scarcity will not be a problem at all. If this is made a legal obligation, people can eat naturally grown healthy food and their nutritional requirements will be met. In conclusion, GM foods can certainly solve the food scarcity to a great extent. However, they are not the only solution. Instead of depending on GM food bought from the market, people should try to grow their own food in their backyard.
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people
has become a matter of concern.
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Some
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people
argue that growing more
genetically
modified
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food
can tackle this issue. In my opinion, GM
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foods
can solve this issue to a great extent
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but
there are
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some
other
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solutions
as well
for this problem.

Genetic engineering can be
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used
for increasing the
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food
production. By changing the DNA structure,
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people
can
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make
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crops
more disease and pest resistant. When
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crops
are not
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destroyed
by diseases and pest, the yield will be more.
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to this, more desirable features can be
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added
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crops
by genetic engineering.
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grow
bigger fruits or vegetables. Nutritional value of
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crops
could
also
be increased
by
genetically
modifying the crops.

However
, GM
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have
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drawbacks and depending more on them is not the right
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solution
to this problem. When
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crops
are manipulated
to increase yield, certain natural nutritional contents may
be lost
and
also
,
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people
may
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get
allergies by consuming these kinds of
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foods
.
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Because
of these reasons it is unwise to depend too much on them. A better
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solution
is to encourage all
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people
to
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grow
their
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food
. If each family can
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grow
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enough
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food
for themselves,
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scarcity will not be a problem at all. If this
is made
a legal obligation,
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people
can eat
naturally
grown healthy
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food
and their nutritional requirements will
be met
.

In conclusion
, GM
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foods
can
certainly
solve the
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food
scarcity to a great extent.
However
, they are not the
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only
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solution
.
Instead
of depending on GM
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food
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bought
from the market,
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people
should try to
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grow
their
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own
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food
in their backyard.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay With a growing world population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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