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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. v. 2
In modern life, people use animals and product animals more and more and destroy the environment for their own use. Some people believe today, it’s not necessary to use animals for everything such as food or other stuff. This essay will discuss the above topic. However, save animals or the environment is important. In the beginning, today, science was developed and scientists produce a lot of things, for example, material like leather in the laboratory. If that face leather used in industry such as use material for produce shoes or other things, they can reduce need the skin of a cow. Another reason, people should change the meals and eat vegetables instead of beef or other animals produce. Because a healthy life is important and if people eat a lot of meat, they will have a lot of problems in their body, for example, blood pressure. The main problem is if the animals disappear, the environment will be destroyed. Because environment related to the animals and if animals died, the environment will die too. However, this product isn’t safe. Evidence suggests some material produces in the laboratory had bed effect on the body and some new disease is epidemic now. This problem has a lot of bad impact in the world such as some people died and if people eat just vegetation, they will have diseases because the body need a portion of meat. Overall, the government and people should solve this problem because animals on the verge of extinction. They should decrease use animals and producing animals.
In modern life,
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people
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use
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animals
and product
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animals
more and more and
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destroy
the
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environment
for their
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own
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use
.
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Some
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people
believe
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today
, it’s not necessary to
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use
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animals
for everything such as food or other stuff. This essay will discuss the above topic.
However
, save
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animals
or the
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environment
is
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important
.

In the beginning,
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today
, science
was developed
and scientists
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produce
a
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lot
of things,
for example
, material like leather in the laboratory. If that face leather
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used
in industry such as
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use
material for
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produce
shoes or other things, they can
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reduce
need the skin of a cow. Another reason,
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people
should
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change
the meals and eat vegetables
instead
of beef or other
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animals
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produce
.
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Because
a healthy life is
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important
and if
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people
eat a
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lot
of meat, they will have a
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lot
of
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problems
in their body,
for example
, blood pressure. The main
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problem
is if the
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animals
disappear, the
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environment
will be
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destroyed
.
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environment
related to the
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animals
and if
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animals
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died
, the
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environment
will
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die
too.

However
, this product isn’t safe. Evidence suggests
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some
material
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produces
in the laboratory had bed effect on the body and
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some
new disease is epidemic
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now
. This
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problem
has a
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lot
of
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bad
impact in the world such as
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some
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people
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died
and if
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people
eat
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just
vegetation, they will have diseases
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because
the body need a portion of meat.

Overall
, the
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government
and
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people
should solve this
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problem
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because
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animals
on the verge of extinction. They should decrease
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use
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animals
and producing
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animals
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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