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Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language Do you agree with this opinion v.1

Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language Do you agree with this opinion v. 1
Individuals nowadays are inhabiting a new ideology of buying new things, then throwing them away after some period of usage. This is having an adverse effect on our environment. There are various reasons for this cause and is causing various problems. With the rise of the world economy, average per-capita income has also increased, leaving individual with more money. This caused some people to make a habit of throwing away things after some use. Moreover there are a number of different varieties of products available. This caused humans to have a lust for using different product of different manufacturers. Also due to the advancement of technology the companies launch new products in the very short time-period, which makes people feel that their product is old, hence forcing them mentally to buy new products. For example, Mobile phone manufacturer Xiaomi Redmi launches new mobile phone every month, of which people having a desire to always have a new model of Smartphone buys a new phone every month. However this false desire has caused big troubles, like environmental problems. Firstly companies have to manufacture new products in great quantity due to great demand, which causes exploitation of Natural resources. Furthermore, the discarded products or the used products need to be disposed off, which is quite impossible due to the large amount. Sometimes the used products which are mostly made out of plastic do not get recycled or disposed off and end up in polluting our mother Earth. It also wastes money, which otherwise could be used for good purpose. This is a major problem on which no-one pays attention, but it needs to be considered. Otherwise it will cause major problems to humanity in the long run.
Individuals nowadays are inhabiting a
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new
ideology of buying
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new
things, then throwing them away after
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some
period of usage. This is having an adverse effect on our environment.

There are various reasons for this cause and is causing various
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problems
. With the rise of the world economy, average
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per-capita
income has
also
increased, leaving individual with more money. This caused
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some
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people
to
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make
a habit of throwing away things after
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some
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use
.
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Moreover
there are a number of
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different
varieties of
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products
available. This caused humans to have a lust for using
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different
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product
of
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different
manufacturers.
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Also
due to the advancement of technology the
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companies
launch
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new
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products
in the
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very
short time-period, which
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makes
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people
feel that their
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product
is
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old
,
hence
forcing them mentally to
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buy
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new
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products
.
For example
, Mobile phone manufacturer Xiaomi
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Redmi
launches
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new
mobile phone every month, of which
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people
having a desire to always have a
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new
model of Smartphone
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buys
a
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new
phone every month.

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However
this false desire has caused
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big
troubles, like environmental
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problems
.
Firstly
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companies
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have to
manufacture
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new
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products
in great quantity due to great demand, which causes exploitation of Natural resources.
Furthermore
, the discarded
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products
or the
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used
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products
need to
be disposed
off, which is quite impossible due to the large amount.
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Sometimes
the
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used
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products
which are
mostly
made out of plastic do not
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get
recycled or disposed off and
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end
up in polluting our mother Earth. It
also
wastes money, which
otherwise
could be
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used
for
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good
purpose.

This is a major
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problem
on which no-one pays attention,
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but
it needs to
be considered
.
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Otherwise
it will cause major
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problems
to humanity in the long run.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that a person can never understand the culture of a country unless they speak the language Do you agree with this opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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