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Traditionally, the university holds one ceremony for all graduating students are awarded their diplomas. Beginning this year, however, the university will hold two graduation ceremonies. Under the new arrangement, half the graduation students will partici v.1

Traditionally, the university holds one ceremony for all graduating students are awarded their diplomas. Beginning this year, however, the university will hold two graduation ceremonies. Under the new arrangement, half the graduation students will partici v. 1
Since time immemorial, in certain drier parts of the world, freshwater has always been a scarce natural resource. However, in the present time, due to various reasons, scarcity of fresh drink has become a global issue. This essay will illustrate some factors contributing to this problem and will also elicit certain steps that can help the national authorities and individuals in controlling this growing demand for natural salt-free water. There are compelling reasons for the shortage of freshwater The main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas. The global phenomenon of urbanization has led to the global surge in potable water requirement. Secondly, increased pollution of natural freshwater reserves due to urbanisation and industrialization has compounded this demand. In fact, since the beginning of industrialisation water from rivers and lakes increasingly used for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipment and so on. Furthermore, in modern times, the growing use of salt-free water for activities like recreational swimming has also catalysed the surge in global water demand. For instance, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts use an avalanche of water. Therefore, water scarcity has risen and is now a global problem. National authorities, on the other hand, can control this surge by implementing public education schemes regarding controlled water usage. Strict national legislation for preventing natural freshwater reserve pollution is also required. Moreover, the government should also set up the infrastructure for purification of seawater into saline free water, which will help in meeting the growing requirement of fresh water. A good example is UAE where desalination plants have been used for many years to provide fresh drinking water. Similarly, the public can also contribute towards this noble cause by conserving water and also by limiting their daily household water usage. They should refrain from performing activities that will pollute natural freshwater reserves. Thus even though, the scarcity of fresh water is a growing global problem, there are various means and methods available, by which both the government and individuals can prevent this from worsening.
Since time immemorial, in certain drier parts of the world, freshwater has always been a scarce
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natural
resource.
However
, in the present time, due to various reasons, scarcity of
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fresh
drink has become a
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global
issue. This essay will illustrate
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some
factors contributing to this problem and will
also
elicit certain steps that can
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help
the national authorities and individuals in controlling this
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growing
demand for
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natural
salt-free water.

There are compelling reasons for the shortage of freshwater The main reason is the overpopulation in the metropolitan areas. The
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global
phenomenon of urbanization has led to the
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global
surge in potable
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water
requirement.
Secondly
, increased pollution of
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natural
freshwater reserves due to
Do not mix variants of the same word ('urbanisation' and 'urbanization') within a single text.
urbanisation
and industrialization has compounded this demand. In fact, since the beginning of
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industrialisation
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water
from rivers and lakes
increasingly
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used
for manufacturing processes such as chemical reactions, cleaning toxic equipment and
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so
on.
Furthermore
, in modern times, the
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growing
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use
of salt-free
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water
for activities like recreational swimming has
also
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catalysed
the surge in
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global
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water
demand.
For instance
, swimming pools at home, theme parks, and resorts
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use
an avalanche of
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water
.
Therefore
,
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water
scarcity has risen and is
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now
a
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global
problem.

National authorities,
on the other hand
, can control this surge by implementing public education schemes regarding controlled
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water
usage. Strict national legislation for preventing
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natural
freshwater reserve pollution is
also
required.
Moreover
, the
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government
should
also
set up the infrastructure for purification of seawater into saline free
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water
, which will
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help
in meeting the
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growing
requirement of
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fresh
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water
. A
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good
example is UAE where desalination plants have been
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used
for
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many
years to provide
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fresh
drinking water.

Similarly
, the public can
also
contribute towards this noble cause by conserving
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water
and
also
by limiting their daily household
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water
usage. They should refrain from performing activities that will pollute
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natural
freshwater reserves.

Thus
even though
, the scarcity of
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fresh
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water
is a
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growing
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global
problem, there are various means and methods available, by which both the
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government
and individuals can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
this from worsening.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Traditionally, the university holds one ceremony for all graduating students are awarded their diplomas. Beginning this year, however, the university will hold two graduation ceremonies. Under the new arrangement, half the graduation students will partici v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
340 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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