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Some people think that a good diet and exercise is not necessary for a health and long life? To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that a good diet and exercise is not necessary for a health and long life? v. 1
It is generally believed that eating habits and exercise play an important role in the growth of physical and mental abilities of every person. Therefore, I strongly agreed that good diet and regular exercise are essential for any person in order to spend a healthy and long life. (48) We had seen in the past that people always eat pure food. They took great care of their diet and regularly do exercise. That is why, they were more healthy and had a long life span. (36) Presently, the people of all ages are much conscious about their diet and health. Nowadays, everyone wants to look smart and lived long, which is only possible by eating appropriate food along with some type of physical exercise. The best diet not only strengthens the physical and mental capacities of any person, but also provides him enough energy to perform his daily work efficiently. Similarly, the habit of physical exercise on a regular basis not only keeps people active all the day, but also prevents them from several health issues like high blood pressure, asthma and laziness. (96) The recent awareness spread by different health organizations has largely motivated the people to set a proper diet plan and arrange a timetable for physical exercise. Thus, if the people keep on following their diet and exercise plans, then our new generation will surely spend a healthy and long life. (51) Hence, I strongly believed that it is the responsibility of every person who wants to spend a healthy and a long life to pay much attention towards his diet and perform exercises on a daily basis. (34)
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generally
believed that eating habits and
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exercise
play an
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important
role in the growth of
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physical
and mental abilities of every
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person
.
Therefore
, I
strongly
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agreed
that
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good
diet and regular
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exercise
are essential for any
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person
in order to spend a
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healthy
and
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long
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life
. (48)

We had
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seen
in the past that
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people
always eat pure food. They took great care of their diet and
regularly
do
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exercise
.
That is
why, they were more
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healthy
and had a
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long
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life
span. (36)

Presently
, the
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people
of all ages are much conscious about their diet and health. Nowadays, everyone wants to look smart and
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lived
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long
, which is
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only
possible by eating appropriate food along with
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some
type of
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physical
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exercise
. The best diet not
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only
strengthens the
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physical
and mental capacities of any
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person
,
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but
also
provides him
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enough
energy to perform his daily work
efficiently
.
Similarly
, the habit of
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physical
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exercise
on a regular basis not
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only
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keeps
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people
active all the day,
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but
also
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prevents
them from several health issues like high blood pressure, asthma and laziness. (96)

The recent awareness spread by
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different
health organizations has
largely
motivated the
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people
to set a proper diet plan and arrange a timetable for
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physical
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exercise
.
Thus
, if the
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people
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keep
on following their diet and
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exercise
plans, then our new generation will
surely
spend a
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healthy
and
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long
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. (51)

Hence
, I
strongly
believed that it is the responsibility of every
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person
who wants to spend a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
healthy
and a
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long
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life
to pay much attention towards his diet and perform
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exercises
on a daily basis. (34)
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that a good diet and exercise is not necessary for a health and long life? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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