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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for health and long life. v. 1
It is a well-known fact that eating a balanced diet and regular exercise are the keys to health and well-being. However, some people claim they are not as important. This essay is against their view and well explain why I think it’s crucial to follow a healthy lifestyle. Eating a balanced diet can help to protect the body from many diseases. A good diet should contain all the essential nutrients that keep our body function probably, which are proteins, carbohydrates, fats, vitamins, and minerals. Health scientists recommends dividing your daily caloric intake of these nutrients according to your body needs. Both over-eating and under nutrition can harm our body and cause many diseases. For example, eating a high amount of sugar and fat in a daily basis leads to obesity, diabetes and high blood cholesterol while a decrease in some vitamins such as vitamin a can cause sight problem. Physical activity, on the other hand, is a great method to maintain your body and mind health. In addition to its rule in decreasing high blood sugar and cholesterol, it clears the mind from life and work stereos and keeps you energetic and more productive. In fact, studies found that regular exercise can increase one's life expectancy by several years. Moreover, exercising keeps your body flexible by moving different muscles and joints at the same time, which in term helps in preventing lower back pain, osteoarthritis and other muscular issues in older age. In conclusion, I believe that physical activity and a good diet are essential for preventing disease and living a longer and healthier life.
It is a well-known fact that
eating a balanced diet and regular exercise are the keys to health and well-being.
However
,
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some
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people
claim they are not as
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important
. This essay is against their view and well
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explain
why I
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think
it’s crucial to follow a healthy lifestyle.

Eating a balanced diet can
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help
to protect the
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body
from
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many
diseases. A
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good
diet should contain all the essential nutrients that
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keep
our
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body
function
probably
, which are proteins, carbohydrates, fats, vitamins, and minerals. Health scientists recommends dividing your daily caloric intake of these nutrients according to your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
needs. Both over-eating and under nutrition can harm our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
and cause
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many
diseases.
For example
, eating a high amount of sugar and
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fat
in a daily basis leads to obesity, diabetes and high blood cholesterol while a decrease in
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some
vitamins such as
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vitamin a
can cause sight problem.

Physical activity,
on the other hand
, is a great method to maintain your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
and mind health.
In addition
to its
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rule
in decreasing high blood sugar and cholesterol, it clears the mind from life and work stereos and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keeps
you energetic and more productive. In fact, studies found that regular exercise can increase one's life expectancy by several years.
Moreover
, exercising
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keeps
your
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body
flexible by moving
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different
muscles and joints at the same time, which in term
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in preventing lower back pain, osteoarthritis and other muscular issues in older age.

In conclusion
, I believe that physical activity and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
diet are essential for preventing disease and living a longer and healthier life.
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6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for health and long life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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