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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. v. 2
Having a healthy lifestyle is trending nowadays. So many influencers show their daily exercise and a good diet to encourage people to start having a healthy lifestyle. However, some people believe that it is just a trend, then we can still be healthy and have a long life without doing exercise of having a proper diet. This thought might be due to the condition of older generations who can have a long life without giving any effort and attention regarding healthy lifestyles. In this essay, I shall give some arguments about why this way of thinking is not applicable anymore for the current situation and generations. I believe both having a proper diet and routine exercise are essential for our health. To begin with, it is true that so many older generations are healthy and have a long life though they never do fitness or have a good diet as what celebrities do nowadays. However, we have to analyse deeply the reason why those lifestyles were not essential in the past. For example, 30 years ago, the level of air pollution was not as high as it is now. People can easily breathe clean air in past decades. Citizens nowadays, especially those who live in big cities, have to neutralise the pollution that is absorbed in their body by routinely drink the infused water, for instance, for the detoxification process. Secondly, older generations’ professions related to physical activity jobs, namely becoming a farmer, carpenter, and so on. They also have to walk miles away daily to reach their working place. Most workers nowadays commute by using their cars and sit on their chair all day long. Hence, they need to go to the gym unless they will be diagnosed with obesity in the near future. Third, older generations’ can easily get their fresh and healthy food from their garden. Most of the current generations live in the high-rise flats with no garden. They eat fast food and processed food as an alternative way for the limited land and time condition. This is the reason why people nowadays have to take care of their proper diet and make an effort to pick or prepare their food. In conclusion, it is true, there are some cases in which older generations are healthy and have a long life without doing a healthy lifestyle. However, the current condition is totally different from it was in the past. Starting from the pollution, people’s sedentary lifestyle, and the consumption of processed food. Thus, I believe the current generations have to make time and effort to do the exercise and have a proper diet if they want to stay healthy and live longer.
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believe that it is
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just
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life
without doing
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thought
might be due to the condition of
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generations who can have a
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life
without giving any effort and attention regarding
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healthy
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lifestyles
. In this essay, I shall give
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some
arguments about why this way of thinking is not applicable anymore for the
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current
situation and generations. I believe both
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a
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diet and routine
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exercise
are essential for our health.

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begin
with, it is true that
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older
generations are
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healthy
and have a
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long
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though they never do fitness or have a
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good
diet as what celebrities do
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nowadays
.
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, we
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have to
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analyse
deeply
the reason why those
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lifestyles
were not essential in the past.
For example
, 30 years ago, the level of air pollution was not as high as it is
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now
.
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People
can
easily
breathe clean air in past decades. Citizens
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nowadays
,
especially
those who
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live
in
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big
cities,
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have to
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neutralise
the pollution that
is absorbed
in their body by
routinely
drink the infused water,
for instance
, for the detoxification process.

Secondly
,
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older
generations’ professions related to physical activity jobs,
namely
becoming a farmer, carpenter, and
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on. They
also
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have to
walk miles away daily to reach their working place. Most workers
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nowadays
commute by using their cars and sit on their chair all day
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long
.
Hence
, they need to go to the gym unless they will
be diagnosed
with obesity in the near future.

Third,
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older
generations’ can
easily
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get
their fresh and
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healthy
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food
from their garden. Most of the
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current
generations
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live
in the high-rise flats with no garden. They eat
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fast
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food
and processed
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food
as an alternative way for the limited land and time condition. This is the reason why
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people
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nowadays
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have to
take care of their
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proper
diet and
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an effort to pick or prepare their food.

In conclusion
, it is true, there are
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some
cases in which
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older
generations are
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and have a
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long
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life
without doing a
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healthy
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.
However
, the
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current
condition is
totally
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different
from it was in the past. Starting from the pollution,
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people’s
sedentary
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lifestyle
, and the consumption of processed
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food
.
Thus
, I believe the
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current
generations
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have to
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make
time and effort to do the
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exercise
and have a
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proper
diet if they want to stay
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healthy
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
longer.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
446 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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