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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us Discuss both views and give your opinion v.2

Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us 2
In the modern age learning or teaching history has been a heated topic constantly. Some people think it is a valuable source of information while others say that it is a wastage of time. Presenting my view I would intend to explore the aforementioned view in the following paragraphs. One should provide a variety of reasons to justify the opinion that in the schools or colleges study become more difficult and study of history is a extra burdon on the students. Subsequent factor could be that knowledge of war' s is knowed by the history and youthful generation are more likely to be behave like obstinate. Obviously a motive could be that study of science is more valuable as compared to the history. For instance, the recent survey findings have clearly indicated that study of history is a nonvaluable part of educational it does never related to the technology. However, a number of definite actions could be take to matigate of study of history is provide the knowledge about our culture and tradition and in which family to belong our grand parents. The most successful way to confront this could be to it is best way to provide knowledge to the generation to generation. The favourable fact could be that our religion book also a history book it' s also written by our gurus. Such as, Guru Granth Sahib g is a sacred book which relates to the Sikh religion. It is also a history book. To conclusion, although there are good reason study of history is a nonvaluable source of education. But in opinion study of history must be provided in the college by the teacher' s. Otherwise our culture will be died. Get
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it is a valuable source of information while others say that it is a wastage of time. Presenting my view I would intend to explore the aforementioned view in the following paragraphs.

One should provide a variety of reasons to justify the opinion that in the schools or colleges
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study
become more difficult and
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study
of
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history
is
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history
and youthful generation are more likely to be
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behave
like obstinate.
Obviously
a motive could be that
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study
of science is more valuable as compared to the
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history
.
For instance
, the recent survey findings have
clearly
indicated that
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study
of
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history
is a
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nonvaluable
part of educational it does never related to the technology.

However
, a number of
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actions could be
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to
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matigate
of
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study
of
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history
is
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provide
the knowledge about our culture and tradition and in which family to belong our grand parents. The most successful way to confront this could be to it
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way to provide knowledge to the generation to generation. The
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favourable
fact could be that our religion book
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history
book
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it&
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also
written by our gurus. Such as, Guru
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Granth
Sahib g is a sacred book which relates to the Sikh religion. It is
also
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history
book.

To conclusion, although there are
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good
reason
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study
of
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history
is a
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nonvaluable
source of education.
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But
in opinion
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study
of
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history
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must
be provided
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Otherwise
our culture will be
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died
.
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IELTS essay Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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