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Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us Discuss both views and give your opinion v.1

Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us 1
These days, the popularity of sports programs on televisions is referred to as contributing to persons' entertaining activities and some people believe that this practice will make negative effects on live sporting activities. As a matter of fact, the beneficial aspects of sports channels on TV are undeniable; the rationale that it is perceived as making individuals ignore to set their foot in the real site to enjoy competitive matches. This essay will examine both two perspectives so as to know what the aspect is more prominent. On the upside, the contributions of sporting programs on television to human life are highly appreciated. To be more specific, today, many individuals are too busy to use their time budget for watching their favourite football players or athletes playing in the stadium, whereby many of them choose the solution to enjoy sport at home- an effective way to save time from movement and expenses from expensive tickets. In this situation, the watchers are able to view the broadcast sporting tournament again at anytime they want, thereby helping them maintain their passion for sport. In addition, the more persons love sport programs televised every day, TV programmers will increase their revenues thanks to advertising products as well as introducing the images of famous athletes, which means that these supporters would have more essential aid to sports activities developed in communities and encourage more persons choose sport as a potential career. On the downside, the side-effects of televised sport ought not to be overlooked. Initially, not least persons have become hooked on sports and they are willing to spend most of their time watching contests or matches. So this passive activity can be the primary agent of numerous health problems such as obesity, eye illnesses, and so on; more seriously, the youth is likely to face difficulties in their learning by the reason of their hobbies of viewing sports channels for entertainment. For another concern, unfair-play images or scenes which are broadcast on TV regularly are the cause of negative or violent behaviours among the younger generations, and this prevents sports from being favourable in public. As mentioned above, I can draw a conclusion that there have been numerous disadvantages from watching televised sport if we do not have a good perception about the benefits of sports. Accordingly, once each individual is able to spend time viewing sport events on Tv logically, sports news can provide lots of advantages to the viewers.
These days, the popularity of
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sports
programs on televisions
is referred
to as contributing to persons' entertaining
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activities
and
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some
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people
believe that this practice will
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make
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negative
effects on
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live
sporting
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activities
. As a matter of fact, the beneficial aspects of
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sports
channels on TV are undeniable; the rationale that it
is perceived
as making individuals
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ignore
to set their foot in the real site to enjoy competitive matches. This essay will examine both two perspectives
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
know what the aspect is more prominent.

On the upside, the contributions of sporting programs on television to human life are
highly
appreciated. To be more specific,
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today
,
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many
individuals are too busy to
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use
their
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time
budget for watching their
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favourite
football players or athletes playing in the stadium, whereby
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many
of them choose the solution to enjoy
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sport
at home- an effective way to save
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time
from movement and expenses from expensive tickets. In this situation, the watchers are able to view the broadcast sporting tournament again at anytime they want, thereby helping them maintain their passion for
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sport
.
In addition
, the more persons
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love
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sport
programs televised every day, TV programmers will increase their revenues thanks to advertising products
as well
as introducing the images of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
athletes, which means that these supporters would have more essential aid to
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sports
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activities
developed in communities and encourage more persons choose
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sport
as a potential career.

On the downside, the
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side-effects
of televised
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sport
ought not to
be overlooked
.
Initially
, not
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least
persons have become hooked on
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sports and
they are willing to spend most of their
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time
watching contests or matches.
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So
this passive
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activity
can be the primary agent of numerous health problems such as obesity, eye illnesses, and
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so
on; more
seriously
, the youth is likely to face difficulties in their learning by the reason of their hobbies of viewing
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sports
channels for entertainment. For another concern, unfair-play images or scenes which are broadcast on TV
regularly
are the cause of
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negative
or violent
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behaviours
among the younger generations, and this
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prevents
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sports
from being
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favourable
in public.

As mentioned above, I can draw a conclusion that there have been numerous disadvantages from watching televised
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sport
if we do not have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
perception about the benefits of
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sports
.
Accordingly
, once each individual is able to spend
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time
viewing
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sport
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
events
on
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Tv
logically
,
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sports
news can provide lots of advantages to the viewers.
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IELTS essay Some people think studying from the past offers no benefits to today s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
408 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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