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Some people think that studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Some people think that studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. v. 1
Schools play vital role in student’s overall personality growth. Few people have a mindset that differentiating students based on their educational level will be more beneficial, however others believe that mixed ability classes aid students. I support the first notion for streaming students based on the judgement on their abilities. To embark with, mixed ability classes provide a vast range of opportunity to grow every student into the different level. Moreover, peers can help each other to get better. For example, one kid is good in the art and drama but weak in the academic study, while other one is of an opposite, they both can help each other to learn and grow together. In this sense, mixed classes provide a scope to develop their abilities not only in academic subject but for other skills too. On the other hand, even though mixed classes help for overall development of students, steaming students based on their academic record and placing them under one roof releases a huge burden from teachers to try various methodologies. Besides this, due to, all students have almost the same level of IQ, it allows teachers to use limited but effective methodology for learning. For instance, scholar students’ class has higher grasping power, such that teachers can stipulate fast completion of normal academic course and go beyond that to teach them in more deep, while bottom ones have low grasping power, thus educator can come up to student level and give slow lessons to give them the clear understanding of subjects. Consequently, pupils with different ability can study efficiently and effectively. To put this in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that, even though arranging mixed ability student class have a few advantages, segregating students based on their academic ability makes the perfect environment for students and teachers both.
Schools play vital role in
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student’s
overall
personality growth. Few
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people
have a mindset that differentiating
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students
based on their educational
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level
will be more beneficial,
however
others believe that
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mixed
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ability
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classes
aid
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students
. I support the
first
notion for streaming
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students
based on the judgement on their abilities.

To embark with,
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mixed
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ability
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classes
provide a vast range of opportunity to grow every
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student
into the
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different
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level
.
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, peers can
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help
each
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other
to
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get
better.
For example
, one kid is
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good
in the art and drama
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but
weak in the
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academic
study, while
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other
one is of an opposite, they both can
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help
each
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other
to learn and grow together. In this sense,
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mixed
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classes
provide a scope to develop their
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abilities
not
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only
in
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academic
subject
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but
for
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other
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skills
too.

On the
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other
hand,
even though
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mixed
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classes
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help
for
overall
development of
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students
, steaming
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students
based on their
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academic
record and placing them under one roof releases a huge burden from
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teachers
to try various methodologies.
Besides
this, due to, all
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students
have almost the same
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level
of IQ, it
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allows
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teachers
to
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use
limited
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but
effective methodology for learning.
For instance
, scholar
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students’
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class
has higher grasping power, such that
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teachers
can stipulate
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fast
completion of normal
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academic
course and go beyond that to teach them in more deep, while bottom ones have low grasping power,
thus
educator can
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come
up to
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student
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level
and give slow lessons to give them the
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clear
understanding of subjects.
Consequently
, pupils with
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different
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ability
can study
efficiently
and
effectively
.

To put this in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that,
even though
arranging
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mixed
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ability
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student
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class
have a few advantages, segregating
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students
based on their
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academic
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ability
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makes
the perfect environment for
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students
and
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teachers
both.
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As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
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IELTS essay Some people think that studying from the past offers no benefits to today’s life while others believe that history is a valuable source of information for us. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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