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Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others say it is government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others say it is government’s responsibility. v. 1
Some are of the view that the residents should maintain the tidiness and sanitation of the streets, whilst others say that it is sole responsibility of government. This essay believes that although the residents pay the taxes for maintaining the orderliness and cleaning of the streets, however, the residents must hold the responsibility for maintaining the cleanliness as they can identify the sources of contaminants and wastes easily due to their longer presence in the area compared to government appointed housekeepers. Residents are bound to pay various taxes, levied by the government on account of providing various services, which also includes the tax for maintaining the cleanliness and sanitation in the surrounding of residential areas. The money collected in the form of tax, from residents, is utilized for hiring third party housekeeping services, which is given the responsibility to maintain the cleaning of residential areas. A recent survey suggests, in developed countries civilians pay about 3% of the total income in the form of tax for cleaning and sanitation. Residents and occupants, who have a longer presence in the areas, stand responsible to maintain the cleanliness in the surroundings. Because of their longer presence they can gauge for the sources of contamination and the wastages, be it people from next house or someone from another street, and this can be informed to the concerned contractor or the housekeeper, responsible for maintaining the cleaning. So that necessary action can be taken for eliminating the source of waste and contamination. According to The Earth, a television channel, in societies, where people own the responsibility to maintain the surroundings clean are found much cleaner, compare to those dependent on the government bodies for cleaning. To conclude, in my opinion, though the civilians pay a hefty tax to the government for keeping the surroundings well cleaned, the locals should own the responsibility for better control over the contaminants and wastes.
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residents
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maintain
the tidiness and sanitation of the streets, whilst others say that it is sole
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responsibility
of
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government
. This essay believes that although the
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residents
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pay
the
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taxes
for
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maintaining
the orderliness and
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cleaning
of the streets,
however
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residents
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must
hold the
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responsibility
for
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maintaining
the cleanliness as they can identify the sources of contaminants and wastes
easily
due to their longer presence in the
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area
compared to
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government
appointed housekeepers.

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are bound
to
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pay
various
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taxes
, levied by the
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government
on account of providing various services, which
also
includes the
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tax
for
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maintaining
the cleanliness and sanitation in the
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surrounding
of residential
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areas
. The money collected in the form of
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tax
, from
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residents
,
is utilized
for hiring third party housekeeping services, which is
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given
the
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responsibility
to
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maintain
the
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cleaning
of residential
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areas
. A recent survey suggests, in
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developed countries
civilians
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pay
about 3% of the total income in the form of
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tax
for
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cleaning
and sanitation.

Residents and occupants, who have a longer presence in the
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areas
, stand responsible to
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maintain
the cleanliness in the
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surroundings
.
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Because
of their longer presence they can gauge for the sources of contamination and the
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wastages
, be it
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people
from
next
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house
or someone from another street, and this can
be informed
to the concerned contractor or the housekeeper, responsible for
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maintaining
the
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cleaning
.
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So
that necessary action can
be taken
for eliminating the source of waste and contamination. According to The Earth, a television channel, in societies, where
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people
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own
the
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responsibility
to
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maintain
the
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surroundings
clean
are found
much cleaner, compare to those dependent on the
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government
bodies for cleaning.

To conclude
, in my opinion, though the civilians
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pay
a hefty
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tax
to the
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government
for keeping the
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surroundings
well cleaned, the locals should
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own
the
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responsibility
for better control over the contaminants and wastes.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think residents should keep their streets clean and tidy while others say it is government’s responsibility. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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