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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighborhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility, while others think it should be the government’s duty. What is your opinion? v.1

Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighborhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility, while others think it should be the government’s duty. What is your opinion? v. 1
People spend a lot of time on watching television these days. This habit, not only ruin their free-time but also keep them away from the outer environment. In my opinion, I completely agree with the given statement because utilising your time efficiently is always a better option rather than wasting it over addictive habits. Although, television is an important source of getting connected to the outer world. But, everything should be done proportionately. People usually spend a lot of their time in a day, sitting and make themselves lazy and ultimately it becomes an addiction. Moreover, they minimize their involvement in most of the social activities, as they like spending most of the time in a day watching their favourite programs. This habit has many long term implications over health, for example, back ache, laziness, loosing interest in day-to-day activities. People stop going outside, interacting with their relatives and keep themselves locked at home. Such practices also affect the work or business and long term effects of such things are bad. However, disconnecting yourself from such information sources is also not a good practice, this will cut you off from the information you can get through news channels, knowledge enhancing programs. One should schedule their time, that's how much time they are going to spend watching it. In conclusion, Modern technology always has something new to teach you, need is to use it effectively. Spending a lot of time on such things will segregate you from social life and adversely affect on health. Such routine should not dominate you, rather every individual should make a proper plan for this.
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ruin their free-time
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efficiently
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important
source of getting connected to the outer world.
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in a day, sitting and
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make
themselves lazy and
ultimately
it becomes an addiction.
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, they minimize their involvement in most of the social activities, as they like spending most of the
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time
in a day watching their
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programs. This habit has
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long term implications over health,
for example
, back ache, laziness, loosing interest in day-to-day activities.
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going outside, interacting with their relatives and
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themselves locked at home. Such practices
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bad
.

However
, disconnecting yourself from such information sources is
also
not a
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good
practice, this will
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cut
you off from the information you can
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get
through news channels, knowledge enhancing programs. One should schedule their
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time
, that's how much
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time
they are going to spend watching it.

In conclusion
, Modern technology always has something new to teach you, need is to
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use
it
effectively
. Spending
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a lot of
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time
on such things will segregate you from social life and
adversely
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affect
on health. Such routine should not dominate you,
rather
every individual should
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make
a proper plan for this.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighborhood, this should be the residents’ responsibility, while others think it should be the government’s duty. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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