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Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes. v.1

Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes. v. 1
Housing is perhaps fastest growing industry in the world. The frantic growth in the housing industry has resulted in many shortcuts employed by builders. Some argue that governments should put in measures to define mechanisms to control quality. While other like to put the onus on the builders themselves. This essay would look into both aspects and conclude by suggesting an idea of fixing the responsibility. History has shown that opportunity of making money plus extreme competition result in cutting corners in quality in every industry. Same has happened in the housing sector as well. There have been many instances all around the world where poor building quality has led many deaths. A study by Mumbai University reveals that there are on an average 100 deaths every year in Mumbai alone because of poor construction quality. Therefore, builders cannot be trusted with all the faith people have on them. The government should define code for building residences and the minimum acceptable quality. Every project should be scrutinised and evaluated at every stage starting from design to fitting electrical wiring. Approval of construction should be withheld if any inferiority is found at any stage. By following this method United States government was able to improve housing by a great deal in the 1960s. Now one would find rare accidents at construction sites or after building are handed over to owners. With above points, it can be concluded that government has a major role to play in enforcing construction rules. Rules should be made to fix responsibility on builders for any lapse.
Housing is perhaps fastest growing industry in the world. The frantic growth in the housing industry has resulted in
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many
shortcuts employed by
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builders
.
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Some
argue that
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governments
should put in measures to define mechanisms to control
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quality
.
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While
other like to put the onus on the
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builders
themselves. This essay would look into both aspects and conclude by suggesting an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of fixing the responsibility.

History has shown that opportunity of making money plus extreme competition result in cutting corners in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
in every industry. Same has happened in the housing sector
as well
. There have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
instances all around the world where poor building
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
has led
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
deaths. A study by Mumbai University reveals that there are on an average 100 deaths every year in Mumbai alone
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of poor
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construction
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
.
Therefore
,
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builders
cannot
be trusted
with all the faith
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have on them.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should define code for building residences and the minimum acceptable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
. Every project should be
Possible spelling mistake. 'scrutinised' is British English.
scrutinised
and evaluated at every stage starting from design to fitting electrical wiring. Approval of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
should
be withheld
if any inferiority
is found
at any stage. By following this method United States
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
was able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
housing by a great deal in the 1960s.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
one would find rare accidents at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
sites or after building
are handed
over to owners.

With above points, it can
be concluded
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
has a major role to play in enforcing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
construction
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Rules
should
be made
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
responsibility on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
builders
for any lapse.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Maintaining safety standard while building homes is very important and some people believe that government should be responsible for enforcing the strict building codes while many others opine that house owners and the people who are working there should be responsible for that. In your opinion who should be responsible for enforcing strict building codes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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