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Some people believe that international trade and communication with other countries is a positive trend, while others think it is harmful to nations and they might lose their identities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples. v.3

Some people believe that international trade and communication with other countries is a positive trend, while others think it is harmful to nations and they might lose their identities. with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples. v. 3
People now live in a global small village where anyone can communicate with each and others only by a click. Some individuals think that international business and sharing their experience with other nations a positive improvement in their provincial. Other people opine that it is detrimental to the nation’s such as their identities may be eliminated. I agree with the prior statement. I intend to discuss in the following paragraphs why I support business and relate to other countries that have a positive progress for all. To commence with, many underdeveloped countries have generated their revenue through export various products to the developed countries. For example, our country is the largest exporter in the world of the ready garment product that has been exported to European countries, the USA, and many other developed countries. This is a significant source of revenue that supports the national budget and it helps to enhance the country's GDP. Many countries have to foster an excellent relationship with other countries because of their social expansion. For instance, some countries have economically developed because of their tourism sector. An international traveller is like to visit where they can undoubtedly learn a new perception, local tradition, and many pleasant things. Moreover, multinational companies have opened their branches to another fruitful provincial due to cheap labour and raw materials and they exchange advanced technology and many other things. However, some people argue that their local civilization has messed up with the western because of the privilege of advanced technology. People who typically believe global transactions and exchanging information will be detrimental to the nations. This is because, they will eagerly consume the same food, same tv programs, wear the same brand clothing. Besides, they will not get many options as local brands because multinational companies will set up their showroom in the local communities. Furthermore, local industries will be demolished when they are building their factories in the local area. Although they have progressively reduced the unemployment rate where they have started their business segment. To sum up, international trade and constructive communication across the border always play a vital role in economic, civilization, and social expansion and it demonstrates a tremendous positive trend.
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live
in a global
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small
village where anyone can communicate with each
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and others
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only
by a click.
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individuals
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think
that international business and sharing their experience with
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other
nations a
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positive
improvement in their provincial.
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Other
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people
opine that it is detrimental to the nation’s such as their identities may
be eliminated
. I
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agree
with the prior statement. I intend to discuss in the following paragraphs why I support business and relate to
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other
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countries
that have a
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positive
progress for all.

To commence with,
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many
underdeveloped
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countries
have generated their revenue through export various products to the developed
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countries
.
For example
, our
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country
is the largest exporter in the world of the ready garment product that has
been exported
to European
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countries
, the USA, and
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many
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other
developed
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countries
. This is a significant source of revenue that supports the national budget and it
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helps
to enhance the country's GDP.
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Many
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countries
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have to
foster an excellent relationship with
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other
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countries
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because
of their social expansion.
For instance
,
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some
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countries
have
economically
developed
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because
of their tourism sector. An international
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traveller
is like to visit where they can
undoubtedly
learn a new perception,
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local
tradition, and
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many
pleasant things.
Moreover
, multinational
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companies
have opened their branches to another fruitful provincial due to
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cheap
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labour
and raw
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materials and
they exchange advanced technology and
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many
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other
things.
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,
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some
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people
argue that their
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local
civilization has messed up with the western
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because
of the privilege of advanced technology.

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People
who
typically
believe global transactions and exchanging information will be detrimental to the nations. This is
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because
, they will
eagerly
consume the same food, same
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tv
programs, wear the same brand clothing.
Besides
, they will not
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get
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many
options as
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local
brands
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because
multinational
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companies
will set up their showroom in the
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local
communities.
Furthermore
,
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local
industries will
be demolished
when they are building their factories in the
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local
area.
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Although
they have
progressively
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reduced
the unemployment rate where they have
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started
their business segment.

To sum up, international trade and constructive communication across the border always play a vital role in economic, civilization, and social expansion and it demonstrates a tremendous
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positive
trend.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that international trade and communication with other countries is a positive trend, while others think it is harmful to nations and they might lose their identities. with this statement? Give your own opinion and relevant examples. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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