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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.37

In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. v. 37
It is common aspects for minority people to stimulate a trip or duty in between completing high school and beginning university study. The positive fact is that it helps them to learn new things. But, most of the young students do not continue further studies. This essay will delve into the positive and negative aspects of this statement using the appropriate templates from cognitive skills. To commence, to improve ideas or pieces of knowledge, it is very significant to join a trip or task. It will enable you to take more challenges in your personal life. By travelling or doing a task at a young minority, it makes anyone perfect in his or her practical life. Moreover, it makes you more responsible at an early minority. Besides, to get a good post in any particular work, you have to keep the previous experience that can earn by travelling and doing tasks at an early youth. For example, in the first world nation, there has an opportunity for students who completed only high school, to get task for increasing ability. As a result, they develop their mind and learn so many things outside the school as an initial minority. On the flip side, sometimes students quiet their studies at an early youth because of having a task in an early state. As a consequence, the country’s long term goal is hampered in this way. The country will be deprived of high innovative ideas that come from higher learning. For instance, the solid financial nation always hires innovative students from the developing country because their students do not want to continue learning due to a normal task. In conclusion, the single advantage of a tour or duty is important to learn, but this can not be forgotten that it hurts on stopping learning at the wrong time.
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people
to stimulate a trip or duty in between completing high school and beginning university study. The
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positive
fact is that it
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helps
them to learn new things.
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But
, most of the young
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students
do not continue
further
studies. This essay will delve into the
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positive
and
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negative
aspects of this statement using the appropriate templates from cognitive
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skills
.

To commence, to
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improve
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ideas
or pieces of knowledge, it is
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very
significant to
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join
a trip or
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task
. It will enable you to take more challenges in your personal life. By travelling or doing a
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task
at a young minority, it
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makes
anyone perfect in
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his or her
practical life.
Moreover
, it
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makes
you more responsible at an
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early
minority.
Besides
, to
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get
a
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good
post in any particular work, you
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have to
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keep
the previous experience that can earn by travelling and doing
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tasks
at an
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early
youth.
For example
, in the
first
world nation, there has an opportunity for
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students
who completed
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only
high school, to
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get
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task
for increasing ability.
As a result
, they develop their mind and learn
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so
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many
things outside the school as an initial minority.

On the flip side,
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sometimes
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students
quiet their studies at an
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early
youth
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because
of having a
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task
in an
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early
state. As a consequence, the country’s long term goal
is hampered
in this way. The country will
be deprived
of high innovative
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ideas
that
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come
from higher learning.
For instance
, the solid financial nation always hires innovative
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students
from the
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developing country
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because
their
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students
do not want to continue learning due to a normal task.

In conclusion
, the single advantage of a tour or duty is
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important
to learn,
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but
this can not
be forgotten
that it hurts on stopping learning at the
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wrong
time.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. v. 37

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
305 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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