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Nowadays, longer distances are traveled by people to work and study on a daily basis. Some considered it to be a negative development. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.1

Nowadays, there is a big problem is that traffic jams and air pollution are becoming worse and worse with the extremely increasing in the amount of workers who live in the countryside. Rarely, there are some solutions that can be taken into account to wipe this problem out. Firstly, one useful way is that the government should have some policies to encourage employers, especially in manufacturing fields, to put their factories in the country. In this case, local labors should be priority considered to work in these industrial facilities. As a result, in spite of a a large number of cars and buses which are full with people travelling on the road everyday, it will be reduced to a few trucks that supply goods to the cities. Secondly, government should build not only in urbanized areas but also in non urbanized areas. With the help of building gigant buildings which provide functional spaces for shopping, offices, apartments, entertaining places and people can spend their time without any vehicle that harm the environment. Moreover, build new big building in the country has a major effect on people who live in the country. In the process of building attract people who live not far from it. After having been built, large amount of workers will be supplied with vacancies. As a result of that, it is no need to go from country to city for work. It decreases harmful gases which get out from cars. In conclusion, I believe that the combination of the two solutions above can solve the problem of traffic congestion and environmental problems that are caused by those people who are travelling a long way to work everyday.
Nowadays, there is a
big
problem
is that traffic jams and air pollution are becoming worse and worse with the
extremely
increasing in the amount of workers
who
live
in the countryside.
Rarely
, there are
some
solutions that can
be taken
into account to wipe this
problem
out.
Firstly
, one useful way is that the
government
should have
some
policies to encourage employers,
especially
in manufacturing fields, to put their factories in the
country
.
In this case
, local labors should be priority
considered to work
in these industrial facilities.
As a result
,
in spite of
a
a large number of
cars and buses which are
full with
people
travelling on the road
everyday
, it will be
reduced
to a few trucks that supply
goods
to the cities.

Secondly
,
government
should build not
only
in urbanized areas
but
also
in
non urbanized
areas. With the
help
of
building
gigant
buildings
which provide functional spaces for shopping, offices, apartments, entertaining places and
people
can spend their time without any vehicle that harm the environment.

Moreover
, build new
big
building
in the
country
has a major effect on
people
who
live
in the
country
. In the process of
building
attract
people
who
live
not far from it. After having
been built
, large amount of workers will
be supplied
with vacancies.
As a result
of that, it is no need to go from
country
to city for work. It decreases harmful gases which
get
out from cars.

In conclusion
, I believe that the combination of the two solutions above can solve the
problem
of traffic congestion and environmental
problems
that
are caused
by those
people
who
are travelling a long way to work
everyday
.
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IELTS essay More and more city workers are deciding to live in the country and travel into work every day. The result is increased traffic congestion and damage to the environment. What measures do you think could be taken to encourage people not to travel such long distances into work?

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