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Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. Most people are reluctant to use public transportation. What needs to be done to make public transportation an active option for more people in your town? v.1

Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. Most people are reluctant to use public transportation. What needs to be done to make public transportation an active option for more people in your town? v. 1
Traffic problems are one of the pressing issues in large urban agglomerations (wrong word) and it causes many kinds of challenges to ordinary people in their daily life. Therefore, many people opt to use their private cars instead of public transport facilities. This essay will firstly discuss the main causes this matter which happening in a rapidly changing world, secondly, look at the possible solutions it might be solved by (wrong structure) government or population. First and foremost, it is obvious that the majority of people hesitate to use public transportation and the main reasons for this matter are the value and quality of these facilities. Take for instance, in some areas, the quality of the public transit system is inadequate and infrastructure is run-down. At the same time, the cost of tickets is often too high as well as it puts people off using public transport. Dealing with this problem, the government should invest much money on buses and trains system improvement as well as to slash the cost of the tickets. Another reason can be the density of people in public places. To put it simply, in many cases, the quantity of facilities is not enough and it results in the crowd among people and even people can spend much time on roads (wrong structure). This issue can be addressed by an increase in the number of transport facilities in all urban places and in this case, this development will preclude losing wasting time for all commuters. Taking everything into consideration, it is evident that the main causes of less usage of public transportation are inadequacy and value as well as losing much time on the roads. All these problems can be solved by putting more money in public transportation and to reduce reducing (parallel structure) the value cost/price of tickets. Unless the government does something to deal with this matter, city life will only get worse in the future.
Traffic problems are one of the pressing issues in large urban agglomerations (
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wrong
word) and it causes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
kinds of challenges to ordinary
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people
in their daily life.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
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people
opt to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their private cars
instead
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport facilities. This essay will
firstly
discuss the main causes this matter which happening in a
rapidly
changing world,
secondly
, look at the possible solutions it might
be solved
by (
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
structure)
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
or population.

First
and foremost, it is obvious that the majority of
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people
hesitate to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation and the main reasons for this matter are the value and quality of these facilities. Take
for instance
, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
areas, the quality of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transit system is inadequate and infrastructure
is run
-down. At the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
, the cost of tickets is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
too high
as well
as it puts
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
off using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport. Dealing with this problem, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should invest much money on buses and trains system improvement
as well
as to slash the cost of the tickets.

Another reason can be the density of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
places. To put it
simply
, in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
cases, the quantity of facilities is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
and it results in the crowd among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and even
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can spend much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
on roads (
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
structure). This issue can
be addressed
by an increase in the number of transport facilities in all urban places and
in this case
, this development will preclude losing wasting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
for all commuters.

Taking everything into consideration, it is evident that the main causes of less usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation are inadequacy and value
as well
as losing much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
on the roads. All these problems can
be solved
by putting more money in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transportation and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
reducing (parallel structure) the value cost/price of tickets. Unless the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
does something to deal with this matter, city life will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
worse in the future.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Every day traffic seems to get worse on our roads. Most people are reluctant to use public transportation. What needs to be done to make public transportation an active option for more people in your town? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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