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Some people believe time is money. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe time is money. v. 1
Some people as Benjamin said in his book “time is money” believe that time is as valuable as money. However, I think the time is more precious than money. As a matter of fact, we cannot use the money to get back time and it lost forever. Firstly, time is priceless in our life. As you know time is moving ahead continuously and nobody cannot stop it or save it for the future, so we should exploit the time to gain our goals and aims in our life. Moreover, understanding the value of time is essential to taste success in our life. Due to the fact that time is limited and predestined, so people know a moment is gone never comes back, and we cannot come back time by money, but when we lost our money we can earn it again; therefore, we should be careful about using our time during life. In addition, managing time is an indispensable factor in life and we should spend our time efficiently and effectively, so every individual should prepare and follow a certain schedule to accomplish target; also, different people have different goals in their life and the importance and irreplaceable of time is different for all of us. For example, students use the time for taking knowledge, working men use it to earn money and house ladies use the time to do their household. Thus, the person who understands the value of time wakes up in the morning until night to do their timetable. In conclusion, the value and importance of time are much more than money, since people know, cannot purchase time when consuming it, unlike money, time can neither be earned nor saved for future use. By taking the right actions at the right time, we can make our life satisfactory and useful.
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is more precious than
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. As a matter of fact, we cannot
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get
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and it lost forever.

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,
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is priceless in our
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life
. As you know
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is moving ahead
continuously
and nobody cannot
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it or save it for the future,
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so
we should exploit the
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time
to gain our goals and aims in our
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life
.
Moreover
, understanding the value of
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time
is essential to taste success in our
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life
. Due to the fact that
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time
is limited
and predestined,
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so
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people
know a moment
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,
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when we lost our
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we can earn it again;
therefore
, we should be careful about using our
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time
during life.

In addition
, managing
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time
is an indispensable factor in
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life and
we should spend our
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time
efficiently
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effectively
,
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every individual should prepare and follow a certain schedule to accomplish target;
also
,
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people
have
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goals in their
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life
and the importance and irreplaceable of
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time
is
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different
for all of us.
For example
, students
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use
the
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time
for taking knowledge, working
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men
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use
it to earn
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and
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ladies
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the
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to do their household.
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, the person who understands the value of
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time
wakes up in the morning until night to do their timetable.

In conclusion
, the value and importance of
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time
are much more than
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money
, since
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people
know, cannot
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purchase
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time
when consuming it, unlike
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money
,
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time
can neither
be earned
nor saved for future
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use
. By taking the right actions at the right
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time
, we can
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make
our
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life
satisfactory and useful.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Some people believe time is money. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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