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Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v.1

Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v. 1
Roads help people go a particular distance and pass quickly from one place to another so that many country have been using them for long ancient times. Although serious problems have arisen as a result of this, there solutions. One of the first problem of the motorways is the ease with which a car is damaged and often someone is hurt by accident. For example, motorist may not see the other car or the engine does not work while travelling. In this case, there is no doubt that this affects their injury and death which is a negative impact for the people and society. Another major problem is exhaust fumes which comes out of cars passing through the roads. This fumes is a serious risk to the health of the people living around it. In addition, it soils not only people but also the environment. Since all existence can live only to breathe with a clear air. It is important that action is taken combat these problems. Firstly, government should ensure that drivers whether they conform traffic rules or break. This will prevent future accident on the expressway, such as requiring more than simply take into consideration. In order not to harm environment, people should decrease building roads and not to cut forest for making ways. Government should consider of the distance between freeway and people residence because the closer houses to the road, the more dangerous to the health. To conclude, the motorways is useful and advantageous that has transformed people’s lives, but not without negative impacts. However, with the right action by individuals and government to the environment, it can be made a safe nature for future generation.
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Roads
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help
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people
go a particular distance and pass
quickly
from one place to another
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so
that
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many
country have been using them for long ancient times. Although serious
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problems
have arisen
as a result
of this,
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there
solutions.

One of the
first
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problem
of the motorways is the
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ease
with which a car
is damaged
and
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often
someone
is hurt
by accident.
For example
, motorist may not
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see
the other car or the engine does not work while travelling.
In this case
, there is no doubt that this affects their injury and death which is a
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negative
impact for the
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people
and society. Another major
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problem
is exhaust fumes which
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comes
out of cars passing through the
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roads
.
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This
fumes
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is
a serious
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risk
to the health of the
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people
living around it.
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, it soils not
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only
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people
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but
also
the environment.
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all existence can
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live
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only
to breathe with a
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clear
air.

It is
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important
that action
is taken
combat these
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problems
.
Firstly
,
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government
should ensure that drivers whether they conform traffic
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rules
or break. This will
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prevent
future accident on the expressway, such as requiring more than
simply
take into consideration. In order not to harm environment,
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people
should decrease building
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roads
and not to
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cut
forest for making ways.
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Government
should consider of the distance between freeway and
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people
residence
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because
the closer
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houses
to the
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road
, the more
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dangerous
to the health.

To conclude
, the motorways is useful and advantageous that has transformed
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people’s
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lives
,
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but
not without
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negative
impacts.
However
, with the right action by individuals and
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government
to the environment, it can
be made
a safe nature for future generation.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. What are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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